Question:
What do you think of this poem?
i wrote another poem, for english again.
i wanna know if it's good enough...or if i need to change something...
"A river, see how it flows
That??s how our life goes
You??ll be stuck, that??s no doubt
But that??s what our life is all about
Your journey in this river will have turns
Which one to take, that??s of your concern
You can change your course
But will take an awful life of force
Life can be sour, or it can be sweet
It??s your life, and it??s how you make it"
sorry, still an amateur...=)
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
good effort but you know it doesn't have to rhyme and sometimes you can create a beautiful piece when you forget about rhyming which just makes i much more difficult
try it, free verse, and let your thoughts flow in whatever direction they take you