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Random, middle of the night poem? Yay or Ney?
What do you do
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I think that the first stanza is good... it sets up a tone of emotional turmoil, possibly over a lover or other "significant other". The second stanza is the immediate response- to cut one self off from the world, from pain... by simply not admitting that the pain is important to you. I think that the third stanza should be longer, and should tie back into the beginning more... The first line, third stanza almost belongs more to the second stanza. I personally would like to see some attempt at a solution other than simply cutting off. Try to illuminate "the better way to deal"... but maybe that gets away from poetic angst into self-help preachy... You're the poet- do what you want ;-)