I wrote this poem and i would like some feed back?

Question:

I wrote this poem and i would like some feed back?

Life and Death One Coming In One Coming Out
To my beloved twin sister Shawna Nicole. Rest in peace.

From the moment I took
My first breath of life I
Lose the only friend I know,
My identical twin.

Where am I? What is going on?
What is happening to me?
Where is my sister?
Where am I going?

People are poking at me,
What is this sticking in my hand?
I am scared out of my mind,
Why are you hurting me?

People are crying,
People are praying for me,
Why is everyone so sad?
Am I going to be alright?

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

It's straight from the heart ,genuine and terribly sad.