Question:
Some more Poetic "Props or Nots"?
Please let me know what what you think of this poem thing.
;)
Amalgamate process
I awake to find the words,
I awake to find humanity.
I awake to find resolve,
I awake to find my infancy.
I learned through joy,
And I learned through reverie.
I learned through grief,
And learned through bravery.
I know my deputation,
I know this, my gift.
I know for what the sacrifice,
I make this conscious shift.
Time as cyclical?
Or, Time as linear?
Does Time escape,
Its natal mirror?
A forest destroyed by fire,
Is the forest born by fire.
The place where life will end,
Is the place where life begins.
With confusion bounded lore,
My shadow and its arduous journey.
Seeks to unearth its archaic soul,
Who patiently awaits her discovery.
Bravery, strength and asylum,
No, less than that, she brings.
Transformed by amalgamate process,
The Spiritual Warrior, now sings.
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
It is ok, better than a lot of "young" poetry. You need to really work on the grammar such as capitalisation and possesive apostrophes. It is a bit ambiguous for my taste, I much prefer Zen poem translations. Do write some more.