Question:
Can you scan my short poem?
Please help me on any changes or anything that I need to do.
I know I messed up.
but there is no other way that i can find out. please help.
Imbibe eager cheetah
the sunset has rised
hurry up and get your water
before the elephants give you a surprise
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
this is an interesting poem--your first? I'll help you line for line.
Immbibe eager Cheetah, (is this a small or young adult?)
The sunset has rised. (with the end of the poem this should be
present tense "the sunset will rise")
Hurry up and get your water; (this is okay)
Before the elephants give you a surprise. (this is a metaphor sounds like you're trying to talk to a naive child or inexperienced person. This is an excellent poem...Keep up the good work.)