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Question: Should I continue my Story!?
I start stories constantly, but I always end up deleting them because they're no good!. I think I may have one now that is possibly a little better!. Don't go easy on me! I wanna know the truth! Is this writing good for a 13 year old!? It's just the start, and I'm not done!.!.!.and I don't have a title!.


I paced through the cool, increasingly dark night, letting the unruffled silence wash over me!. All that could be heard was the sound of my heart walloping against my chest, echoing throughout my tense body, and the soft pat of my Nikes slapping lightly on the dusty, red dirt road!. I already knew I was making a terrible mistake, although I was only a few feet from the driveway!.
I moved my hand to my face and was surprised to feel a warm stream of tears rolling down my cheeks, slightly tanned from the warm summer days spent in the forest!. My weeping continued as I came to the realization that I would never be able to return home!. Running away was the only option, now that I had made the first move in doing it!. Going back would mean facing Dad again, facing all the pain and discomfort around him!. I could not return, and I had the bruises beaten on my back and neck to prove it!.
It was a warm, Colorado summer night, fortunately for me!. My backpack was the only thing I had time to pack, and the only thing I could carry with me easily!. I was also glad to have my fur lined jacket on, which would be good as fall approached!. That is, if I hadn’t found a home by then!. The stars, which generally shone brightly overhead during the summers, were blotted out by the inky black sky!. The small sliver of moon directly above me was the only light guiding me through the night, glossily burning through the hole in the dark sky!. I was reluctant to use my flashlight right now, as it might help Dad or the neighbors find me!. Well, if Dad even knew I had left!.
I heard the hushed engine of a car approaching, the wheels crunching against the crumbly dirt road!. I turned slowly to see headlights in the distance, coming toward me quickly!. A short, quick gasp escaped from my chest, and I jumped off the road, into the bushes, smacking my head against a tree as I descended from the jump!.
My stomach went queasy, sending out a small amount of saliva from my mouth!. I coughed, and unwillingly pushed my head back into the bush I had landed in!. Everything was spinning!. I couldn’t see anymore!. All I could make out was the dull headlights of the car I had been trying to avoid, passing by!. My vision was fuzzy, and the back of my head where the tree had smacked it sent shots of agonizing pain and adrenaline throughout my body!. I could taste a mixture of blood and nose contents slither down my throat, causing me to gag wildly!. Everything went black as the night!.

The light when I finally reopened my eyes was unbearable!. It sat high in the bright blue sky, blazing through the branches of the trees above me, and burning a hole through my skin!. I still felt as if I couldn’t move!. My short brown hair was matted with blood and dried mud, and two small dry lines of red came out of my nose!. I felt so dirty!. This was not how I had planned my runaway!. Then it hit me!. I was only down the road from my house!. Had Dad seen me!? Had he come to look for me!? Had the person in the vehicle last night seen me!? Questions spilled out of my dizzy, achy mind, filling me with anxiety!.
I glanced at my watch to find that it was late in the day!. I gulped again, now realizing I had to get out of here before a search party or Dad could find me!. I slowly pulled myself out of the bush, grasping how much blood I had lost last night when I saw the blood covered bush!. My backpack was lying on its side!. Relieved that it hadn’t gotten muddy or bloody, I picked it up off the ground, and slung it over my shoulder, pulling out a hairbrush!. Thank God, I thought as I felt the fat plastic handle in my grasp!.
Soon the knots were out of my hair, and I was fairly sure I didn’t look that bad!. I took a small sip of water from the large clear plastic bottle I had packed, and stumbled back to the road, walking at a slightly faster pace!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I do the same thing, start then delete!.
But, what you really should do is not delete it!. If you get really bored, take a small break then come back to it and edit it!. And another tip- create a character profile and an outline because it allows you to know your story so it is more vivid and interesting!.

And your story is absolutely amazing!. Your word choice really creates a painted image in my head, but maybe use a few less adjectives or your story becomes muddled, busy and hard to focus on!.

In my opinion you really know how to set a scene, I want to read more and meet the characters!.

So yes, you should continue writing, you have natural talent that goes beyond the common skill of a thirteen year old!!

And your writing style is absolutely marvelous!.

Good luck!!

~*~Smiles~*~Www@QuestionHome@Com

It is seriously very good!. I wanna read more, XP
One note though: Try and use less adjectives!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Yes, you should continue your story!. You write well!. I've gone to a few workshops where they have a good critique system, so I know a little of what to look for!.

Along with e!.watson's good suggestion, I have a similar suggestion, and it's a common problem--you have way too many adverbs!.

Do this--in your document, do a "find" search (it's under Edit if you use Word) and type in the box, "ly "!. Make sure to leave that space after the "y"!. This will pull up all words ending in "ly ", which will mostly be adverbs!. It will also pick up words like "family", of course!. Go through and highlight each one and read the sentence without it!. The writing is almost always stronger without the adverbs!.

By the way--your age doesn't matter!. Just go for it!.

Example from your work: "I paced through the cool, increasingly dark night, letting the unruffled silence wash over me!. " Take out "increasingly"!. It adds nothing and just makes it wordy!. If you want to indicate that it is getting darker at the moment, change "dark" into "darkening"!. also take out "unruffled"!. Silence is strong enough on its own!. You could even take out the "cool", but that may be necessary to your story, so you decide!.Www@QuestionHome@Com