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Question: Do you like my story!? (Not a teen yet)!?
This is one of the stories I wrote, I'm 10, pretty mature for my age and I was just wondering if you could give me any tips on my story, do you think it's good enough to send to a Publisher!? Maybe you could even rate it!? Thanks, I have another story on here you might wanna check out aswell!. Oh, and I'm 10!. Here it is!.!.!.
My name is Samantha but people call me Sam for short!. I work at a milk bar like some teenagers usually do!. I’m 14 and I have a very, very, very annoying little sister!. She’s called Gabriella her job is ruining my LIFE!. But luckily I have Mum her job is telling off Gabriella 24 hours a day which is how long she annoys me!. Right now I was sitting on our new white couch in the lounge room which Gabriella had already spilt chocolate ice-cream on!. “Darling, no,” I heard Mum say, “It costs too much money!.” “What!?!” Gabriella cried!. “What costs too much money!?” I asked curiously!. “Soccer apparently,” Mum replied, “I know Gabriella wants to do it and how much she loves playing soccer but I can’t waste all my money on it!.” Mum shook her head!. “Sam can pay for it!” Gabriella said excitedly!. “You’ve got to be kidding me! I’ve got Mum’s bills to pay already!.”Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
i think you've got potential, and you should definitely keep writing if it's something you enjoy, but you need to grow up some before you write about things you don't really know much about!.!.heh!.!.!.not to sound mean or anything, but you know what i mean!? maybe try to write about kids your age, i guess!?
i've been writing since i was old enough to hold a pencil and believe me, if you keep writing and get better, DEFINITELY save this stuff because you'll look back on it and laugh at yourself!. good stuff right there lol
little tip: when writing dialogue, you want to start a new paragraph for each thing a new person says!.!.!.example:
Darla and her father were in his truck, driving home from her first day of school!.
"Thanks for picking me up, daddy!" Darla said!.
"Not a problem, sweetheart," her father replied, "I know how you feel about riding the bus!."
"Yeah, it smells funny," Darla said, wrinkling her nose!.
"Funny like bad cheese!?" her father asked!. She giggled!.
"No,daddy, just funny!" she cried while he reached over with one hand and grabbed her knee!. It tickled and she laughed harder!.
in microsoft word you should indent everything too, like paragraphs, but yahoo answers doesn't let you do that (lame!) lolWww@QuestionHome@Com
You did very well!. What is really great is your use of punctuation!. Good work Sam!. There are many adults who can't punctuate as well as you did here!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Hm!. I suggest you wait a few more years!. Not trying to be mean, but as you grow older, you're writing skills become more vivid!.Www@QuestionHome@Com