Question: PLEASE be honest!?!?!?!?
Why is that I miss those warm sunny days!?
When all the world is so off pace,
And lazy days go by and by,
While the sun hangs lowly in the sky,
Its heat beats down upon my head,
As if to cast a spell down on me,
I lay down slowly on the luscious green,
So soft and cold,
Yet truly refreshing,
As a gentle breeze puts me at ease,
All the days trouble drift away,
Wild Flowers brush against my face,
With colors so full and fresh,
As if falling from an artist’s canvas,
The sweet aroma putting me to sleep,
Almost like in a timeless dream,
I must get up and do my work,
Yet the rich yellow bees buzzing,
And tree leaves fluttering,
Keep me down,
Just a little bit longer!.
I am 14 :)Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I'm not going to read it, because they're are actual websites for this (www!.fictionpress!.com)!. Post it on there and get their opinions!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
it's a good start to poetry, but im pretty sure i have read a million things exactly like this, all posted by people on Y/A!. Read some Shakespeare and Robert Frost and Carl Sandburg and Earnest Hemingway!. All of those guys have very individual writing styles, and are amazing poets!. You just need practice and to develop your writing style, because frankly, your writing style is pretty bland!. also, you need to pick which type of poem you are doing, you switch halfway though!. look up poem structure!. keep writing though, seriously, you will get better i promise!. (from one writer to another)Www@QuestionHome@Com
I liked how it started off rhyming but then you went into a more free verse!. Try and pick one or the other!. It's also a better flow if your stanzas all have the same number of beat or syllables!. however, there are no rules in poetry unless you have a desired specific type of poem that you are writing!.
Sounds like a nice day procrastinating from doing homework!Www@QuestionHome@Com
This is good for 14!. You haven't had much time to really study poetry or read a lot, in the sense that would make you a great writer, but it's obvious you understand the basic principles and traditional ideas!. Keep working on it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Nice imagery!.
I think you mean "day's troubles" instead of "days trouble"!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Very deep, might i recommend a different site such as the person ahead of me!?Www@QuestionHome@Com
its kewlio!.!.!. u just gotta proportion it correctlyWww@QuestionHome@Com
What is the question!? Its a nice poem!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I liked this poem - you are talented!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I don't mind it!.!.!.But if you want to show it to people, try fictionpress!.com or a poetry site!.Www@QuestionHome@Com