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Question: What do you think of my prologue!?
Here go's!.!.!.!.!.

There's something about a dark alleyway or a hallway thats mystique and dangerous!. The sound of a womans heeled boots on pavement or linoleum as her fingernails scrape the walls making an eerie noise that makes me want to curl up in a ball and hide in a dark corner!. But there's no fear now, only a mission to complete!.

A clever person would have run by now but this person knew me!. He looks at me confused!. Unsure whether he really should run or actually talk!. Stupid boy!.

"Are you followin's me!?" He slurs a little!. Too many drinks!.

"No!." I whisper still walking closer!.

"Then why areya headed in the opposites directions!?" He plays with a button on my black jacket!. Sadly Grady is a foot shorter then I!. It made me laugh when I first met him!.

"Because I have something to tell you!." I whisper in his ear and at the same time I take hte hand that was playing with my button finding the tender pressure point on the wrist on the wrist!. He gasps in pain!. It helps awaken you when your drunk

"Owe Eleonore!" His eyes widen!. I keep the pressure on!. He's dating my best friend Dianna and I don't like it one bit so thats why I'm about to give him a warning!.

"Listen carefully Grady!. Break Diannas heart and Ii'll break your face!. Got it!?" I gave him the look I kill with!. His arm shook beneath my hand!. Inflicting pain and fear should keep him in check!. He nods several times and the takes off running and tripping half way down!.

I turn around finally headed home hands in my pocket laughing!.

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So remember Grady is a little tipsy so thats why the spelling of certain words would be purposefully misspelled!.

SO I also have a few questions!.

What kind of person do you picture Eleonore!? Grady!? Dianna!?
What do you think each of them look like!? Post a pic of each of them if you'd like!. I know there isn't a lot of information on their looks but use your imagination please!.

also what do you think so far!?
What do you think the story is going to end up being like!?Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I like it, you have a decent style and it has potential!. There are many interesting direction that it could lead!. Just fix some of your grammar and add detail to really portray the eerie feeling!.

i imagine Eleonore to be a snotty, opinionated young woman!. I see a tall girl with a flat figure!. I see her having stormy gray eyes and thin, bright lips!. She has dry, straw coloured hair that is either down or pulled too tightly in an updo!. I see her with a pale complexion with slightly rosy cheeks!. She is also very thin!.

I imagine Grady to be a short, confused guy!. i see him as a scruffy, unkempt boy with reckless blue eyes!. He has dark hair that is always in disarray!. I see him as a guy with no care of rules and someone who acts much tougher than they really are!. I see him with a heavy brow and eyes that are thrown into shadow!.

Dianna, I imagine her to be a popular chick, who has trouble making decisions!. I see her as a girl who really relies on her friends, she is someone who is easily persuaded!. I see a tall, statuesque blond girl with dark blue eyes and a slightly tanned complexion!.

I like your story, god luck, keep writing!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Oh i love it!
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Good job!
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So far I think Eleanor is a b**** that puts her nose where it doesn't belong!.
Grady is a louse and Dianna is a doormat if she seriously can't solve her own relationship issues!.

I think your grammar needs a bit of help!.
Before proper names, commas are always needed!.
Sadly, Grady is a foot shorter then I!.
"Owe, Eleonore!" (like that)

Your opening paragraph was half decent!.Www@QuestionHome@Com