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Question: Is my story any good!.Please i dont know if i should keep writing!?
is my story any good!? should i keep writing!?i know i need to fix a few things!. ok here it is!.!.!.!.!.

I couldn't sleep, the moon outside was full and gleaming throught the window!. Getting up from my extreamly messy bed, I put on whatever I could find!.I practically ran into a tree (well not really ran, but floated) because of my inhumanly speed!. Being the only vampire that had many gifts often draw attention to me, and attention was something I really hated, but the gifts could be very useful most of the time!. Like now, I was using all of the powers I had been gifted, I was able to float, (as you may already know) be invisible, and use my feeling of when others were coming!. Right now, nobody was coming!. It was kind of strange that I had that many powers, when I was only a young vampire that had been going to the Vampire Acadamey for four months now!.
Suddenly, I was in Moonlight Park (which was said to be prettiest at this time of night) and then I realized it was a full moon!. The last full moon had been terrible, my best friend, Ayla, had died right in my arms!. She was the one who I had felt closest to, and we were practicully sisters!. Sadness had washed over me, as I realized that the place my powers had taken me was the place she had spent the most of her time!. She had made me come with her here so many times, this place was how she got away from everything!. There was a moonlight path that went into the trees and she would disapear there without anyone noticing, I was the only one she trusted!. Just as I looked around our secret place, a tear escaped from my eye!. This had been the first time I'd been here without her, the first time since she!.!.!. No I wouldn't think about that!.Everything around me was suddenly a blur, I dropped down to my knees and nothing mattered anymore it was just Ayla that did!.I missed her so much, I didn't know what to do without her,she was a part of this place I couln't be here without her!.
As much as I tried, I couldn't get away from here!.I had just been frozen to the ground, unable to move!. It had been like I needed to see something; like i was ment to see it!. There she was, through my blurry tears i saw her!. Ayla hadn't been the same, she was even more beautiful than she had been!. Something about her was different!. I couldn't figure out what it was though!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


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I would have to agree with the "graceunderpressure" comment about not giving up on writing!.

You have a LOT of courage posting your writing online for criticism, not to mention writing something about Twilight!. Personally, not a fan, but you do have potential with writing!.

Something I suggest, I personally struggle with first person!. Even being an English Major!. Try re-writing it in third person!. You may realize you enjoy writing better that way!. First person is used too much and it's easy to struggle with!. I would love to re-read this in third!. Give it a shot! :)Www@QuestionHome@Com

great story, continue the great work!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Vampire much!?Read something else!.then write!. otherwise its great!PS YOU ARE NOT BELLA CULLENWww@QuestionHome@Com

Twilight rip off!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

How old are you!? It seems you don't know how to form compound sentences!. Just keep practicing!!! Why the hell are you going to quit writing because random people on a yahoo answers site told you you're not good!. Pay attention in English class and keep practicing!. If you really loved writing, it wouldn't matter what ANYONE said!. You would pursue it with all you heart!.

Oh and don't listen to this girl above me ^^^ your writing needs work!. It's not GOOD nor is it horrible!. Its just nothing special!. Get it!? You can start with originality!. Twilight is another person's novel!. Just keep practicing like I saidWww@QuestionHome@Com