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Question: Do you think this is a good start for my story!?
I'm writing a story just because I'm bored!. Do you like it so far!? Oh and could you give me some ideas on what should happen in the story!? its going to be about something supernatural!.

It doesn't matter where you move or where you go, life will always follow!. I guess that doesn't count for me though, as I don't have much of a life to follow me!.
I looked at Michigan one last time, before we had to leave for the airport!. I liked it here, sure it was cold and cloudy, but it was just starting to feel like home!.
"Carmela, it's time to go!"
"Sure, Mom, I'm coming!."
I ran over to the yellow taxi, and ended up tripping on my shoe lace and falling on the wet ground!.
"You okay!?" my mom asked!.
"Yeah, I'm fine!." I lied!.
When we arrived at the air port, it smelled like someone was wearing too much cologne!.
We got on the plane, and I dozed off to sleep!.

"Wake up, sweetie!. We're here!."
I didn't answer, and I just got my bags from the compartment and we got off the plane!. My mom got her cell and dialed a number, I'm guessing it was Teresa, my moms friend!. She had to come pick us up from the air port!.
A car pulled up, that was Teresa, and we got in!.
"Mela! Gosh, you're all grown up!. Last time I saw you you were 7 years old!."
"Yeah!.!.!."
We arrived at the house, it was a copper red color and it looked really old!.
"Come on, lets go see the inside!."
We walked inside and it looked just as old as the outside!. Oh well, I knew it was all my mom could afford on a teachers salary!.
"Where's my room, Mom!?"
"Upstairs, just go down the hall and take a right!."
I walked down the creepy old hallway, and found my room!. Already had furniture, Teresa bought it and moved it in for us probably!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
i love it!! it doesn't sound too much like twilight, but a little i do have to admit!. but i love how you begin the story --- the very first line!. Www@QuestionHome@Com

Lol I like it! I do that a lot to!. It resembles to the beginning of Twilight to me, its very interesting!. Planning on finishing it!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

wow, really good beginning!.
i like it very much!.
it really resembles the first chapter of twilight

good job!. i hope u finish it!Www@QuestionHome@Com

i liked the first few lines but after that it was just unoriginal!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

not enough description, sorry and yes, very much the same as Twilight >!.>
maybe she gets involved in this musical/drama at school and she is sent of to fight in the iraq war because no one likes her because she thinks she is bella!. osama is now using giant chickens as his secret weapon and the bella impersonator befriends a rooster which grows big because she feeds it rooster nuggets and she rides it through town to Osamas lair and kills him with a defective Osama nugget, and he dies!. Bella impersonator becomes the hero and is awarded a life time supply of cheeseballs!. I Can see it now, "Bella Impersonator and her giant rooster"
Or "Bella Impersonator and the cheeseball factory" or even " Bella Impersonator and the great iraqi war" or EVEN the best one,
"I Copied Twilight and turned it into ****!"

Just what i think!.
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