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Question: How is this story I am writing Part 2!?
For those of you who read my previos story this is another chunk of it

“I’m sorry but- now I have to kill you!.” Sam 360ed his arm and got a grip on the man’s gun behind him!. The strength of the man surprised him!. Back and forth the gun tilted each person getting a turn at the upper hand!. Around Sam there was a slender piece of wood perched upon a wall, a cement brick, and a cigarette lighter!. Taking good use to his surroundings, he swung his left foot at the piece of lumber and it fell with a loud crash on top the man’s head!. Sam swiped the gun from the man’s limp hands and followed after the running Deverto!.

The chase
Sam swerved an alleyway then hit a dead end!. I knew I shouldn’t have done business with this guy! He weaseled around the contract so he could pay me minimum! No one messes with Sam Turive! A bare ladder sat across the brick wall of the dead end!. “This doesn’t take a genius!.” He mumbled to himself!.
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
like i said b4 it's really good! keep writing! Www@QuestionHome@Com

Sounds good i want to know what happens next!. I don't agree
it is comecky * - at all , i think it sounds like a crime story and
action and suspense!. So all the best!.

Keep writing!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Never put actual numbers in a story!. Spell it out:

360---three sixty

It seems like a cheesy 'hero story'!. Like, I feel like I'm a little kid reading a comic book about a Hero called 'Sam Turive'!.Www@QuestionHome@Com