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She gazed over the plains of Adair, despair just settling into her bones!. She could but see half a league in front of her!. She froze and listened as all that she knew was being destroyed behind her!. She dare not turn around and face this horror!. The bright lights of the fire emanated and gave her a shadow of what once was!. Although it was a grave loss, to her it was a grave beginning!. A freedom she had only dreamt of!. She was glad that they chose their attack now, and not when the sun god was up in the sky, or she never would have escaped!. She had fled, shadowed by the darkness when she had heard battle cries to the east of the Fort!. There had been black creatures guarding each entrance, and her only hope of survival was through the small tunnels!. Her mother had showed her these tunnels before she passed away; they had been waiting for something like this to happen and prepared for it!. Only she, and a few others, knew of these tunnels, but none chose the cowardly route as she had, and in the end everything in the dreaded Fort had been burned alive!.
So finally!.!.!. she was alone!. Completely and utterly alone!. She looked into the empty darkness ahead of her and sighed a sigh of relief and of dread of what was to come!. She walked with haste into the blackness ahead of her, guided only by the bright stars above!. She held her pack close to her and every now and then she would hold the red-gem necklace her mother gave her!.
Her mother was strong and fearless, even the men of the Fort would not dare cross her!. She had been protected by her mother her whole life, and could remember no life outside the Fort!. She protected her up until she passed away two years ago!. She had been strong, and never cried once!. Not even now when she was faced with perils far beyond her comprehension!. Often times she would look down at her beloved gem and wish she could just toss it into the dark bliss in front of her, and forget about her mother!. But it was far too precious to her to just toss it away simply!. Www@QuestionHome@Com