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Brittany Harvede had been walking down the halls of her boarding school one Saturday morning!. But before she could do anything, a tall figure with brown long hair, unlike Brittany’s long blonde tresses, jumped out from behind a long green plant in the corner!. Brittany, startled, yelped and said, “Aaaaaaah ” before she could contain herself, and Riley Swift was doubled over in laughter!.
“Riley ” yelled Brittany, accidently so loud her voice echoed in the corrider!. Riley immediately got solemn, and then pulled Brittany’s arm toward her dormitory room!. “Riley, where are you taking me!?” asked Brittany, but Riley just put her finger to her mouth and made the “shh” gesture!. Finally, they stopped at the big, brown bulletin board!. Riley pointed to a drawing of a girl with long hair reading!. “So!?” said Brittany!.
“Not that, Britt,” said Riley!. “the message next to it!.” Brittany looked over at a poster listing times of a concert!. And bus times!. But what Brittany couldn’t help noticing wasn’t the fact that the concert was tonight, or that it was in Rankin Park, which was literally two minutes away, but that the concert was for the band who had at least a million CDs sold out on the first day of releasing; Angelz!. They were the best girls band for miles, who lived in the same town as White Willow Oak Boarding School For Girls!. Brittany’s eyes grew big as she turned to see Riley!. “So!.!.!.,” said Riley, “Annette, Kristy, Jade and Chloe all are going!. They asked if we wanna come!. I said we’d come, but of course I have to make sure with you!. You don’t have dance today, do you!?” she asked, but for some reason, Riley looked annoyed!.
“Nope, no dance,” said Brittany brightly, but added, “why do you look so annoyed!?”
“Kaylee Birston!.” said Riley absently!. Brittany knew nothing was wrong!. Every since Brittany moved to White Willow (three months ago), Kaylee Birston had tried to win Brittany over, but Brittany knew somehow that Kaylee was mean and spoiled, always getting poor grades, and of course, being rich!. But Brittany herself was rich, and she knew tactics of other rich girls, so she had known better than to be “friends” with Kaylee!. So Kaylee turned against her own wishes and now made fun or annoyed Brittany and her friends whenever they passed them!. But thank goodness, Kaylee wasn’t in any of their classes, whereas Annette, Kristy, Jade, Chloe, Riley and Brittany were in the same class; There were exactly three buildings for two grades: seventh and eighth in the first (where Brittany and her friends were), ninth and tenth, and one for eleventh and twelfth!. Each building had two floors, with classroom on one floor, and dormitories on the other!. On the second floor, where Brittany and Riley were, had the dormitories!. There were five groups for this floor: Teal, Gold, Silver, Gray, and Navy!. Kaylee and her clad of friends were in Gray, while Brittany and her friends were in Gold!. Each group had their own teachers downstairs, so no one in Gold and Gray had the same teachers!. There was a whole different building for lunch!. This tells just how well White Willow’s business is!.
“So!.!.!.shall we go and tell the others!?” said Brittany!. She walked toward the Gold Group Lounge!. When Brittany has first seen the lounge, she thought she was dreaming!. There were couches everywhere, a soda machine that was loaded with the best and sweetest drinks, vending machines with candy and chips and packets of mini powdered donuts that Brittany loved, and a sign up sheet for various activities that matched with the weather!. And to top it off, the walls were a splendid color of rich gold, that shined brightly whenever light was shined from the windows!. There was a microwave, a T!.V!., and a DVD player, and not to mention a glass case that was four feet high, stacked with DVDs of the latest (and classic) movies, stacked all according to genre: horror, drama, action, and fantasy!. But, as always, there was one downside to all the freedom: uniforms!. The uniforms were the school’s colors, white and light gray!. All the girls had to wear a white short-sleeved top with long white pants and a light gray sweater to wear if it got cold!. One good thing about the dress code was on the weekends, Tuesday and Thursday you could wear anything of your choice!. On weekends, you could order pizza using the phone in your Groups’s Head’s office!. The Gold Group’s Head was Mrs!. Pratinly!. She was a tall woman with black hair in a tight bun, and wore a lot of gray!. She was very nice, but if you got on her bad side, let’s just say you aren’t a lucky person!. The popularity of Brittany and her friends grew steadily over the weeks, until Brittany was liked by every girl in the Gold Group, known as a straight A student by every Gold teacher, and only Kaylee had only anything to say mean!.
As they approached the lounge, they heard lots of chatter and excitement!. Milly Strants, a nice but brown haired shy girl, walked up toward them and said, “Did you sign up for the bus!?”
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I think it's good!. If you turned it into a book, i would defiantly read it! The first paragraph might need a little editing, but otherwise it's great!. i mean since theres no indents the area up 2 laughter!. not all of it just a little of it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

i'd read it!. lol id get mad if i hadn't signed up for the bus and every line had names!. good story! just read over it and check grammar!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

That is a good story!. If it were a book I would buy it!. My best type of book is mystery!. Www@QuestionHome@Com

I have to say I read the first sentence and it pushed me out!. The first chapter is like a bun of a burger!. The rest, not last are your mustard, pickles, burger and stuff!. Last Chapter sums up the, but leaves question about the new books!

Example, read the last three paragraphs of a series!. See if it invites your mind to the next book!.Www@QuestionHome@Com