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The snowflakes fell in flurries, each one of them noticeably falling in a collective pile of white dust!. Every powdery flake seemed to call my long, dark eyelashes home, coating them thickly in the white snow that seemed to fall from the heavens!. It was odd how they stuck to me like that, especially with the icy wind that whipped painfully at my pale face!. The thin jacket wrapped around me did little to protect me from the frigid wind; I still felt every gust and shivered violently in response to each one!. My eyes gazed down upon the blanket of white beneath my feet as I began to ponder exactly what I was planning to do!. Was this the right path for me!? I've walked so many of those wretched dirt paths for more, my judgment was muddied!. The thought of being sent to yet another foster home brought nothing but sadness to my heart!. It would be just another story of heartbreak and betrayal to add to the memoirs known as my life!.
Gazing up at the sky, I felt my tears nearly frozen on my reddened cheeks!. Quickly brushing them away, I took a deep breath and picked up my bags!. I started down the long driveway to get to the house!.
I curled my toes hoping to warm them as I walked!. My heart was thudding a tempo to the beating of my boots on the iced pavement!.
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