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Question: What do y'all think of this story so far!?
It is a sci-fi fantasy book that is basically science fiction based humans versus heaven and hell!. There is a lot more to it than that, but I can't explain it all!. Here is the first chapter (which i am still writing) tell me what you think!. And if you would like me to email the rest to you when it is finished, PM me!.


Crimson Tears!.
By: Jacob K!. Hires

Chapter one:
Krenoth paced back and forth on the edge of a vastly deep canyon!. A rock would slip loose into the darkness of it's depth every now and than as his foot passed over!. The skies were a deep red hue, with the accent of black clouds and orange lightening streaking to the charred plains below!. Sulfur and smoke was thick and heavy in the air, he could hardly breath!. The roar of thousands of daemons could be heard behind Krenoth!. They were ready to fight for the same cause as him, weather rash or not!. Some even fighting amongst each other as a way to establish who was more powerful!. Though Krenoth was a dark angel, he was still a daemon at his core, and understood how these daemons thought!. He gazed out to them, than back down into the canyon as his body surged with excitement, grief and fear at the same time!.
At the deepest reaches of the canyon, a small, glowing, orange dot could be seen!. Though it looked as if it was but a dime held at arms length, in all truth it could swallow entire mountains!. The small dot was a massive portal to Ethera from Helliana!. To a war ground that thousands had spilled their blood on!. Though it seemed pointless, this battleground would decide the fate of the conflict!. Krenoth would spill his if need be!.
On either side of him, he stretched his black, feathered wings!. He drew his blade, made of the ivory of a past reaper, it was a mystical blade!. Intricately engraved with skulls and golden in the handle, this was a rare blade!. Carved on the top, left face of the blade were etched the words “Nex mos servo sententia puteus , pro vita sto non hic procul hac mei”!.
He took one last breath, than he leaned forward, and fell into the canyon!. He fell for what seemed like an eternity!. Than he could feel the heat given off by the portals harsh, red ire!. He felt as if he would burn to ashes, but than the heat suddenly stopped as he touched the portal ever so slightly!. All was black for a moment!. Than a piercing ring came, and he was flung out of an exit portal onto the cold, snow capped concrete of a war torn city!.
He took a moment to recoil; he stood up slowly while smearing blood off his forehead and the side of his face, a large cut now rested just above his left eyebrow!. The city was bitterly cold and the sound of gunfire rang out across it!. Some sounded muffled, some was clear and obviously close!.
Krenoth stood inside a blast crater, and pieces of stone wall lined the edges,signifying that a building stood here not long ago!. Krenoth slowly scaled the sides of the steep crater, than stopped just shy of the edge while kneeling and peering over and down the street!. After taking time to carefully analyze the surrounding area, he established it was clear, and took a closer look into his environment as any good warrior would!.
The sky was a dark gray, and snowflakes fell softly to the ground like an ever growing white sheet!. Though it could not be seen clearly, a massive battle cruiser hovered just inside the clouds; it could only be seen when a lightening bolt rang out of the clouds or a cannon fired into the city below!. Though, at this point in time it was more of a ruin than a city, few skyscrapers stood without gaping holes torn in them from bus sized shells that rained from the battle cruiser!.
“Hey, **** it's ******* Reaver!!” Krenoth swung around just in time to see a soldier readying to fire his weapon at the top of the crater!. A volley of tracers flew over his head as clear as a firework display; he leaped to the left just in time to escape the next, though he did feel one go into his arm with a burning sensation!. 3 more soldiers popped their heads and rifles up, and began to fire on him just as quickly as they appeared!. Krenoth leaped into the sky and out of sight quickly!. He simply could not kill all 4 of them at once without serious injury “****, anyone got any readings!?” Said the first soldier
“That's a negative!.” Said the second!. Krenoth landed and watched them from the 23erd story of an adjacent sky scraper!. Krenoth quickly scanned his arm, a quarter sized hole was ripped in his flesh!. Grinding his teeth he slipped two fingers into his wound and yanked out the still smoldering bullet!. He quickly recovered from agony and watch closely as his adversaries moved down the street slowly and down into the crater, careful to keep their lines of sight as open as possible!. The lead soldier ran up the crater wall and fell to his stomach!. Pointing the gun down range, he looked to the others!. “clear!.” he said!.
Krenoth stalked them for the next 3 minutes!. “I think he is gone!.!.!.!.” Suddenly one of the soldiers Www@QuestionHome@Com


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how old are you!?
this is amazing though a couple of spelling mistakes
but all n all the idea is fantastic i would definatly read this!

the way its written out makes perfect sense!.!.!.i can imagin whats happening as i read it!.!.!.whereas the book im reading at the moment even though its good sometimes confuses me because of the way its been written
oh whatlanguage was that written on the sword and what did it mean!.!.!.just curious!? Www@QuestionHome@Com

Amazing Www@QuestionHome@Com

well its awesome i got into it and im not into books at aaallWww@QuestionHome@Com

woah thats intense!! i would buy it! I really like the names and ancient writings and everything!. verrry sci-fi! Looooove it!Www@QuestionHome@Com

its really interesting but u need more details like at the part where the soldiers r shooting at him, it seemed like he was jumping around a bit and i was kinda confused there but overall its very cool! keep it up! (:Www@QuestionHome@Com

Not really my genre, but it's well-written!.

Just be careful with grammatical stuff!. Have someone edit it for you if you plan on submitting it for something!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

fantastic! Just one word of advice- don't be afraid to use cuss words!. I'm 13, and in the novel i'm writing the characters curse all the time!.Www@QuestionHome@Com