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Now what I need is help figuring out how I should go about writing a certain scene in my novel!.
Gregory (The protagonist) has just killed a man for the first time, (It is in first person, and he is a warewolf) This is also his first time being a warewolf, it is nighttime, and the man is actually a man who was trying to kill Gregory!. I want help on how to write how much Gregory enjoys the taste of the man's blood!. (Sorry if its gory) But I just cannot figure out how to write it!. Can you give examples if you don't mind, I will not steal it I just need example plz!. Give ideas of his thoughts and his actions aswell!. He is not an evil guy, but the curse is taking over him!. Thanks, answers will be appretiated!Www@QuestionHome@Com
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Okay, first, you'll need to decide if you want some kind of war going on in his own head, human vs!. werewolf!. This will determine how you write the werewolf scenes!.
It seems that you do, so my advice is this: Describe things like the taste of blood as being something that tastes good and satisfying!. You can liken it to human foods if that fits, but depending on the audience you want to reach, I wouldn't recommend that!. Flat out similes turn out to be pretty cheesy!. Anyways, describe these things in this way and either have your protagonist's thoughts conflict with the way he feels (for example, slide in a "No! I don't mean that!" sort of thing every once in a while) or have him feel horrible and disgusted with himself after the werewolf scene when he's human!. Or both!.
So!. I hope this helps!. I don't think I was as specific as you hoped, but I hope this helps!.
Edit: Kind of going with Norah's example, and I don't know if it was a mistake or not or I'm misreading it, but she used both "he" and "I" while referring to the same person!. That would be a great idea if you had the story in his pov and he referred to his werewolf side as "he" and his own human self as "I!." Then it would be like he doesn't think of himself as a monster!. Then after the kill, he says "I" and refers to both the werewolf and human in him!. Then he finally realizes that the curse is taking over him and that this is what he has to live with!. Get it!? I think that would be a great way to do it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Think of the blood as a life force!. It's not merely blood!. It would be warm and, yes, salty!. But also slightly metallic!. Think of your favorite meal or desert!. How it makes you feel to eat it!. How that makes it's way down your throat!. How does it feel!? How do you feel mentally when you've had your fill!? If it has some alcohol to it then it would be heady!. And utterly enjoyable!. Think of it in those terms!. Www@QuestionHome@Com
Short example:
My teeth, as sharp as a dagger, punctuated his pale skin!. I muffled out his agonized screams as his warm, crimson blood filled my thirsty mouth!. It was moist, sweet, salty, and delicious!. I savored every bit of it as it streamed down my dry throat!. He tasted sumptuous like the finest cut of thick, juicy meat!. I teared at him, viciously, until I reached the bone!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
thanks for helping with my story =) i will do my best to return the favor!.!.
first find good words to describe the taste!.!.!.is it good to him!? or is it like something he needs but doesnt like!?!?
salty!? sweet!? metallic in a way!?Www@QuestionHome@Com
It's 'werewolf'!.
It tastes warm and salty !.!.!.!. that's what blood tastes like!. Www@QuestionHome@Com
the blood tastes thick and saltyWww@QuestionHome@Com
I could only explain in a story complex, if that's alright:
'The blood coursed through his veins sweeter than life itself!. His body longed to it like a child longed for milk!. And when I heard his heart go through that terrible rhythm, I knew that I had to kill!. It was in my nature now, and now that I had tasted the flesh I knew I could never go back!. I would never be the human I wanted to be, but I could try to find redemption in the lies of the world!. Everything I would do, be, I would be a murderer!. It didn't matter who, or what, this was going to be me!. My actions are mere dust!. I took a man's life!. I was scum!.'
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