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Question: I'm writing this book, and I want to know what you think!. Ten points best answer!.!?
Heres a description: Theres this boy named John, he's been an orphan since he was 2, and cannot remember anything from his past!. He is now 12 years old, going on 13, and he is adopted by a the Conwall family!. He starts his sixth grade year at a new school, and things start happening!. (Note: Johns last name was unknown until the end of the book) After the first week of school, John notices one of his teachers, Mr!. Skipes, watching him very closely!. He receives a photo album, full of pictures from when he was a kid, but he doesn't know who sent it to him!. He begins uncovering things from his past!. He finds out that his mother was killed, along with the rest of her family!. He also finds out that no one has seen his dad since the day John was orphaned!. One day, on his way home from school, John notices Mr!. Skipes following him!. He asks the man what he is doing, but is drugged and taken to a place that I will keep a secret!. When he wakes up, he sees pure blackness!. I wont tell you the rest, but in the end, Mr!. Skipes, and Johns unknown last name plays a major part in the book!. What do you think!?

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I say it's a great START! Although, if you are thinking about writing a chapter book, there will have to be many other events and extra things that happen in the book!. There has to be things that build up the story!. What else could happen in there that makes your reader even more hooked!? How could you start the story to build it up even more!? Okay, so maybe im not an expert, i'm only 11 and in the 6th grade but trust me, i started writing when i was 7!. I am also starting to write a new book, to add to many others that i have written!. Chapter books and short stories, narratives for school!.!.!.i have quite a bit of experience!. This next story i am about to write, i am thinking about sending to an editor to see if i can get a chance in publishing it!. I'm not gonna tell you anything about it, you'll have to wait!. I really like your thoughts in your story!. With what you summorized, i already have many questions!. Is Mr!. Skipes the father or have something to do with the orphaned boy and his family!? How old are you and how much writing experience have you had!? Are you thinking of publishing this book!? I would love to know more about this story cause it's basic building blocks fit together nicley and sound like a good interesting story that i would be interested in!. Do you need any tips on writing because i would love to give you some that i sometimes work with! I can tell you one thing, for my age i am a really picky writer!.!.!.on myself!. If i dont like something about something i write!. I start over!.!.!.sure i'm hard on myself but it helps me get out my best ideas! You should probably start out typing your book instead of writing!. I'm a pretty fast typer and when i am writing i have so many ideas that it's hard for me to get them out when i am writing!. If i type i think faster and get out really good ideas!.!.!.writing on paper waste paper and is a slow process!. Never just accept something that you truely dont like!. Be sure to keep trying over and over until you get your story just the way you like it!. If you are still gathering some ideas for your story, one of the best times is at night when you are laying in bed, or (if you are in school) during a boring part of class!. I keep a writing journal or paper with me (not all the time) but sometimes if i am out somewhere and i get an idea i find something to scribble a couple ideas or even words that will remind me of this idea i got that i can add to my piece later!. It's also important to really build up the character and voice in your story!. Get in depth and flow with your words!. Use different strong words that give a lot of meaning throught out your story!. also, when you use dialog, be sure to mostly use the word she said or says he, even though it's not that stong!. Because using words like he smiled or he questioned or she decided or she thoughtfully asked a lot because it makes it confussing and overwhelming for the reader!. I know this from experience and from even reading what i've written myself! Try different things with your story to turn it up a bit!. Make it different!. I really hope i could help!. Add me in your contacts because i would love to chat with you some more about this! Keep on writing!!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Well, I'll be honest!. The plot doesn't sound creative or original, and it's very predictable: Mr!. Skipes is John's father, right!? I'm not by any means saying you shouldn't do it, however; even the most cliched stories can be great if done right!. If you work it the right way, this could be a wonderful story indeed!.

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i guess you can change the age, not having a past at 2 is not really that important!. you might want to give some importance as to why he seeks to know his past!. it needs a hook, why is it important like an accident or something that the majority can relate to!. Www@QuestionHome@Com

If the audience is children I would lose the drugging/abduction scene!. That is very disturbing!. Reminds me of "Ransom!." And I am getting this Harry Potter vibe, so hopefully it's not going in that direction!. Other than that though, it sounds like an interesting premise!.
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It sounds really cool!. I think it's gonna be a good read!. Don't go for the obvious twists though!. Have Skipes be John's fathers enemy or the man who Murdered his father!. That would be a good twist!. If you want more tips I have an online writing workshop you can use to discuss different topics with other authors!. www!.aspiringwritersworkshop!.webs!.com

Over all it sounds like a good book!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

it sounds good but make sure thank it is different from all the other orphan books out there y'know!?
Oh does he end up being John stripes!.!.!. everyone seams to think than so amke sure he isn't and that is a good plot twist!. ; )Www@QuestionHome@Com

sounds pretty good so far! A lot better than the tripe most people are passing off as literature these days!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I think this will be a best seller and I will want to read it! It seem like a mystery and hopefully you do get this book published caz I will want to read it it seems very good!Www@QuestionHome@Com

interestingWww@QuestionHome@Com

i think its pretty good! keep going if u love to write! no one that tells u they dont like it should just be ignored!.!.!. if u love writing keep goin! its just as good as u think!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

it would be interesting if the dude tried to kill the kid!.(but didn't like succeed)
lol!.
-sounds interesting!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Is John's unknown last name Skipes!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

good, but i think that Mr!.Skipes end up being his dad, im good at predicting stuff like thatWww@QuestionHome@Com

That sounds VERY good i would Definitly read that bookWww@QuestionHome@Com

sounds pretty good
hope to read it one dayWww@QuestionHome@Com

its rlly gewd actually!.!.!. i dunno kinda reminds me of harry potter !.!. i think the teacher is the dad!.!.!. if it is then!.!. srri but dats too obvi!. change thatWww@QuestionHome@Com

Well to me that sounds pretty good!.!.!.but if Mr!. Skipes actually is his dad and your not trying to trick us!.!. then you shouldnt make it so obvious!.!.!. at least thats how i think it is!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Very good book you are undertaking!. I suggest that one old person should come into your story later!. He/she is a relative of his mother's family!. Does the story happen in India!? Any belongs of his mother, say, a pair of shoeses, a necklace, a ring, !.!.!.!.!.!. His mother is very beautiful!.!.!.!.!. HIs moter's father is a very rich merchant !.!.!.!.!.!.!. And I also suggesst that the book can be turn into a film which will be adopted by an Indain film company!.!.!.!.!.!. In short, I hope you'll success!. Any murder in your story!? Or just by a ship accident his mother familly was killed!. Well, I am eager to know!.Www@QuestionHome@Com