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Question: Is this a good paragraph for my essay!?
I am writing an essay about Barack Obama and John McCain!. Please do not think I want you to do my essay I just want opinion!. It start liked this,
The presidential election this year , is going to have an interesting outcome !.Barack Obama the Democrat nominee and John McCain the Republican party ,both of the candidates have plans to deal ,with the issue our country faces everyday!. For example, Abortion, education and Illegal drug!.
How can I continue or what is wrong, please help me!.
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
You must pay more attention to your sentence structure: subject and verbs!. Be careful of your run-on sentences!.

This years presidential election is going to have an interesting outcome!.

Barack Obama, the Democrat nominee, and John McCain, the Republican nominee, both have plans to deal with the issues our country faces everyday, such as abortion, education and illegal drugs!.

To continue you might compare what one candidate has purposed as opposed to the other candidate!. What did each say about what they would do regarding abortion, education, and illegal drugs!?

Good luck!. Have someone like your mom read your final essay for corrections!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Here's a paragraph:

The presidential election this year has been a fight for victory!. Barack Obama, from the Democratic party, and John McCain from the Republican party, both have plans to change the future of America!. Education, taxes, crime, and the current economy crisis!. Each party will have plans to conquer these problems we face in our daily lives!.

Tip: Avoid 1st person words like "I, Me, We, Us, They" and etc in your introduction!.Www@QuestionHome@Com