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Question: What do you think of this short story!?
Hi, Im knew to this writing of short stories so if you can give some constrctive criticism along with some helpful tips that would be great!. By the way,can a short story end with a cliff-hanger!?

Thanks

He stood there embracing his fellow priests whom were servants of Apollo!. They could hear the clashing of swords and banging of shields they knew it wouldn’t be long before Troy fell before their very eyes!. As they stood there, Priam finished embracing his fellow men, and walked away from his fellow servants and held his hands up in a tearful and desperate attempt for prayer in protection from the Greek Army!. Eurodys, the second high priest, bent before the golden statue of their patron god behind Priam!. Priam was humming in prayer when all of a sudden, Priam felt his feet being crushed by a hard, bald structure, behind him lay an arrow embedded in Eurodys back!. It was not a long time after when they knew the Greeks would break through the defences and delight in victory in the yards of Troy!.

There was abrupt choas!. “ Have you no honou……” Priam was interrupted by a sharp pierce in his chest, he saw the ground getting closer as Agamemnon stood after him, in his hands, a spear piercing through Priam’s chest!. “ Rest holy king!” he mocked as he erupted in laughter and vigorously pulled the spear out of Priam’s chest!. “ Bring them!” He ordered as his soldiers put forth the two remaining high priests, Tactton, and Ylises!. He raised his hand and as soon as he lowered it, the heads of these high priests rolled on the floor towards Agamemnon’s right foot, their blood staining the holy ground!.

The last defence of this city was located above the holy chambers, pass the library until finally reaching the resting rooms of Helen and Andromeche!. The last few-remaining soldiers did their best to keep their door closed and tightly secure as the Greek tried to batter through it in their infinite numbers!. Six archers stood far away from the soon-to-be battered door, as they prepared their arrows!. Paris lay there, clutching the sword of Troy tightly in his fist, and wondering what fate has destroyed or rescued his father!. He could feel the ground shake as the door continued to receive more damage, it wouldn’t be long before the Greeks penetrated through all defences of the city and burned it to the ground!. Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Very nice! Yes, stories can end in cliffhangers; in fact, I like it when they do!. It needs some grammatical editting but I really enjoyed it!.

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Nice work!. I wasn't sure it was my cup of tea in the beginning, but you did a good job of reeling me in!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

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that was great!


you should become a writer!


also i think it is cool when there is a cliff hanger at the end!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

dont really know much about christianity, sorryWww@QuestionHome@Com

it is sort of good sort of bad but it got boring in the first paragraph and yes a short story can end with a cliffhangerWww@QuestionHome@Com

pretty short for a short story!. but great descriptions!Www@QuestionHome@Com

good story, you should write more!. and then post them on a website or blogWww@QuestionHome@Com