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Question: What do you think!? (10 points for best answer)!?
constructive criticism please!?!?!?

About ten minutes passed by and I was starting to feel a bit claustrophobic when I realized that the tiny dot of light was growing steadily brighter!. I could now make out the details of the tunnel wall!. It was a mixture of stone, dirt, moss and vines!. Most of it was covered in abandoned spider webs, destroyed by the moisture from the condensation of the puddles below my feet!. I let out a small shriek as a fat, black beetle scurried past the tips of my toes, almost touching my foot!.
I quickened my pace and rushed through the last of the tunnel!. I stepped through it!. I was on the other side!.

I blinked in the light of the omnipresent Sun!. It took a moment for my eyes to adjust, but eventually my surroundings became clear!. I was standing in an unfamiliar clearing of grass, facing a thick wall of trees!. Behind me was the entrance to the tunnel!. Not unlike the other end, it too was hidden by moss and rocks!. I walked unsurely towards the second set of woods, trying to make out where I was and where the forest would lead!.
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first i think that you need a comma between by and and in the first sentence!. next you described the landscape well but what about your characters movements!? other than those, pretty good!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

amazing!!! I could visualize everything and I felt the intensity and the curiosity!. I want to read more, lolWww@QuestionHome@Com

A nice passage!.

Perhaps it defines your life and your desire to find your path in life by having to make difficult decisions in the face of uncertainties!.

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it is great!. it creates a mental image in peoples heads!.Www@QuestionHome@Com