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Position:Home>Books & Authors> Hi im writing another book ?Question: Hi im writing another book !? Normal, what is normal!. Living happy ever after!. Yeah right there is no such thing as happy ever after only the real world!. And the real world sucks!. In the real world there is no where you can hide!. You have to stick it out , no matter how bad it is!. But to tell you to tell you the truth there is people who have it worse then us!. But when your going through something extremely bad , you think that there is no one in the world who understands your pain!. But there is always someone who will understand you ,to tell you the truth they are probably going through the same thing as you!. When your going trough a bad patch there is always someone to talk to, don’t think of the worse way out!. And don’t be afraid that you think you are being a snitch , because you are only doing what is best for you!. I have tried everything , but nothing works , I just want o get away from this torture!. But there is no way out I have tried everything, tried telling , tried taking my life did any of those things work!? NO! It just made it worse …!.there is nobody in the world that can feel what I am going through!. its very short i know but i've just stared !.!.it is not finished yet!. Www@QuestionHome@Com Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: can you please hurry and finish so i can read the whole thing!?!?!? it's beautifully written and sounds like a perfect start to a best-seller!. you are an amazing author, and don't let anyone tell you otherwise!. Hope this helps -CeciliaWww@QuestionHome@Com omg that sound really good can you send me the rest when you do some more xxWww@QuestionHome@Com omg!!! it really really really sounds FANTASTIC!!!! AMAZING!. I would love to read it!. how old are you!?Www@QuestionHome@Com You need to fix all the typos and punctuation mistakes!. There's roughly two a line!. Succeeding in the writing world is hugely based on image - and the presentation of work!. If you're serious about succeeding in what is an incredibly competitive industry, you'll need to really address those weaknesses!. Anyone in the publishing world who saw this would hand it straight back to you - not because the ideas aren't good - but because the mistakes are so distracting it's hard to focus on the subject matter!. You seem to have alot of potential but - if you're serious - you'll have to try and find a less cliched subject matter!. There are so many stories out there like this it's not funny!. Good luck, though! Www@QuestionHome@Com I feel like I'm reading a memoir or an essay--and no, that's not a compliment!. Nowadays, readers want fast-paced!. You need to act first, explain later, which means get rid of this info dump about your philosophies of normalcy and tough times!. Readers don't want your philosophy: They want your story!. Give that to them!. Start with some sort of action, like a snappy dialogue that gets readers going, "Oh my God!.!.!.what's going on!?" And please, stay out of the cliches!. Rough patch is a cliche!. I would say Normal, what is normal!? is a cliche!. Living happily ever after is a cliche, and no writer should be allowed to make a philosophy out of it anymore!. You need to really fix your grammar!. It should be 'there are people!.!.!.' Yeah right, there is no such thing as happily ever after; only the real world!. Here's a bit of advice: When you post a piece of your writing, you need to make sure it is grammatically correct!. Otherwise, it's a waste to even post it!. There are people on here who have been writing for years who judge how good your writing is based on grammar!. I can tell you were obviously in a hurry when typing it, but good crits don't need to go to waste!. Basically, this start is cliche!. It's like I'm reading your diary or your memoir or some essay about the philosophies of normalcy and tough times!. EDIT: If someone asks your age, don't give it to him/her!. You want to be treated the same as every other writer out there!. I do not treat a thirteen-year-old differently from a thirty-one-year-old!. Using your age as a crutch isn't fair for those who are older and have just started, and yet they have to handle the brunt of criticism because they are older!.Www@QuestionHome@Com |