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Question: RACISM as a PLOT for a STORY!?
I'm writing a story about a very beautiful female judge named Jamie!. In this story, Jamie had a homebirth with her son Dante who is a black boy although she's caucasian!. She got pregnant with a guy she met at the disco: she felt a strong passion inside and they went to a motel where they made love all night!. When her parents knew that Jamie was expecting a boy, they criticized her a lot ( just because her parents are very religious and conservative)!. But the worst happened when Jamie was giving birth in her home: when Jamie's parents saw that Dante's black face was emerging Jamie's vagina, they hated him with all her mind!. They desired that Dante was born dead, all because he's black!. But Jamie loves her son very much, he's the light of her life!. For this reason, Jamie had a great conflict with her parents because she wanted them to accept her son!. Another point of conflict to Jamie is because her son's father is a professional killer and she's a judge!. When the authorities knew that Jamie had a son with a mafia's killer, they wanted to end her professional career!.
TO BE CONTINUED!.!.!.
What do you like the PLOT of this story!? What do you think to use racism in a story!?
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I think you have a unique story here!. I also think if you continue to work it and tweek it you will find that the basis of the conflict is not the color of the baby!. That in the context you have above is actually an aside a sub-plot if you will!. The true crux of the story being the murderer having fathered the child!. Granted the idea of love for that one night is cool but is it really!? This is another sub-plot!. Your plot line should focus on things such as Does the father know he is about to have a child!? Does he want the child!? Does he want the mother!? When does Jamie tell him and how!? As a judge the idea of dating a professional killer is more of an issue that simply having her child fathered by one especially if she didn't know at the time of conception!. If this is going to be a plot point consider cleaning it up by figuring out if the father is a part of the child's life and when does Jamie learn that the man is a killer!? How does she react!? Is she at first mortified to learn that she is carrying the offspring of such a cruel and callous individual!? Or is she sickened at herself for being so careless as to NOT USE A CONDOM on a one night stand!? If she is a judge then clarify in the story why Jamie's parents feelings play a role and what impact it has on her health and that of her child!. Is she living with them after the child's birth!? Are they in subtle ways trying to harm her (by perhaps identifying the father to the media or her superiors) or the baby!?
What you have provided here is a really great storyline now it is a matter of making it worthy of your writing!. Make sure to ask questions!. Example Mafia's killer!? The father killed people in the mafia or does he work for them and if so being black in the mafia is lucrative but not for any long period of time!. He would eventually become a liability who is expendable!. If Jamie is dependant on her familial unit then how old is she to be a judge and still need them in that capacity!?
The plot elements are all there but I, in my humble opinion, feel as though you need to reorganize them and think through the plot more thouroughly!. You have choosen two very clealy defined high powered positions for Jamie and the father!. You need to do the research about how they meet and how the situation could be handled and if they will be involved etc!. And in doing so you may find more information relevant to the main characters!. Race IS an issue especially with the 'Mafia' and even in politics (check this years Presidential candidates) so yes a judge would be deeply affected in her choices and decisions!.
If you are determined to use the family and racism as the main plot point you need to reconsider the other facets!. Because if I were to read the story, me personally, I'd be thinking 'she's a judge for crying out loud!. Leave the parents alone and raise your kid lady'!. And again what about 'black kid raised by white parent, issues! What does she know about black culture, what is this kid going to be raised as, how is he going to be treated in a white school with a black face or in a black school with a white parent!?' The parents though she would be alone to me are the easiest thing to get over!. LEAVE!. Religious, previously loving, caring people!.!.!. Tough my kid is black and you can't accept that then you no longer accept me, I'm out!. As a mother yeah kid comes first parents opinion hurts but I'll live!.
I hope you are able to focus the plot and have it peak and recede to a conclusion that is honest and exciting!.

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It's an interesting plot, indeed!.
But, I think you should develop it, and work on it!. There are many developing and possible ways of increasing the plot line and the storyline!.
Yes, Racism is an exciting plot device!. At least, for me!. You can give many messages and meanings through the novel , on this subject!. Where the readers can enjoy and learn a same time!.

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How old is Jamie!? If shes under 30 then I don't suggest making a judge because it is unrealistic if shes younger!. Maybe make her something else at a law firm or a cop or something in criminal justice!. Great plot though other then that!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Sounds amazing! I would totally read it!. hah, but don't say "emerging Jamie's vagina," say "emerging Jamie's body!." Hah, just a tip!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Sounds exciting and the racism can be a very good plot device to explore feelings!.Www@QuestionHome@Com