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Question: Is this good for a ten-year-old that just started working on trying to write a romance novel!?
Well, my cousin is a 10-year-old girl that just wanted to start writing a romance novel =O!. She told me that I was the only person she told me about her idea and asked if the first paragraph she wrote was good or not!. Can you read it and rate it!? Here:
I stared deep into his thoughtful, beautiful blue eyes!. He stared back into my eyes!. Then he smiled, and made my heart skip a beat!. I started walking toward him a little closer!. Suddenly, I could see my own reflection reflected from his eyes!. It was as if he could see every one of my eyelashes so clearly because my face was so close to his!. Just when we were about to kiss, the romantic spell was broken by an alarm clock!. As my dream was about to dissolve, he told me, "I love you, Emma"!. I finally woke up with the disappointment of waking up realizing that it was all a dream after all!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


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It is excellent for a ten-year-old!. It's a lot better than much of what the teenagers on this site write! Plenty of romance novelists know no more about true love than the average ten-year-old, so I don't know why some people think she can't write a romance!. There's nothing wrong with second-hand knowledge, at least if you aren't trying for the Nobel Prize in Literature!.

Don't take this the wrong way, Steph L, but the original version was better!. Your revision kind of fell flat; the style seemed artificial and, while you did fix redundancies, it made it kind of boring!. I like fresh writing, that either hasn't been trained or creates the illusion that it hasn't!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

A ten-year-old writing a romance novel!? As far as I'm concerned, she doesn't have experience with it!. What she will be writing is basically adaptations of what she read in other books or watched in movies!. In order to write a full-fledged romance novel, she needs to understand the feelings herself--and I'm talking about true love, not playground love!. Www@QuestionHome@Com

can i have an autograph!.!.!.God for a 10 year old, that's a very good introduction!. excellent actually!. very vivid description and it kept me reading wanting to know what would happen next!. and you know what, to market her book as a 10 year old, i see it big time!.!.!.get in touch with me once she starts signing her book in barnes and noble or borders!.!.!.very good!. support herWww@QuestionHome@Com

Um, a ten year old cannot write a romance novel!. She's ten!. Tell her to wait a bit, have her learn the ins and outs of writing, and maybe take a writing class!. Www@QuestionHome@Com

I think its cute, I started writing at eight ^!.^
Now is when I'm getting into writing romance novels (eighteen now)!. Anyways hope she continues, what made her write a romance novel!? Www@QuestionHome@Com

That is pretty good for a 10 year old!. But why is she writing a ROMANCE novel!?!?!? Sounds like a dream I would have about my crush lol!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

no!.!.!. 10 year olds can't write romance period!. she should stick to playing with her dolls or whatever it is a 10 year old should be doing!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Yes, that is very good! She needs to learn to show and not tell, but she's only ten so that can wait!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

That is really good for a ten year old tell her to keep on writing!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Tell her to go for it!. I think it's great!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

A 10 year old!? Oh good Lord!. That is ill!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I'm writing a romance novel too!. My characters name is Emma too!. :o
Lol, anyway it's good for a ten year old!. BUT, if she wants to become a good author she needs to make her sentences flow!. She should read OUT LOUD, and see how it flows!. It needs to be smooth and beautiful!. I will rewrite this for you!. :)

Looking deeply into his thoughtful blue eyes, I could see him staring back in to mine!. He then smiled, making my heart skip a beat!. I felt an urgent need to come closer to him!. Once I was close enough to look in to his beautiful eyes, I could see my reflection shimmering in his pupils!. Getting up on my tip-toes I leaned in to kiss him, when the romantic spell broke by the sound of my annoying alarm clock!. Just before my dream dissolved in to nothing but memories, I could hear a faint voice in my head whispering "I love you, Emma"!. I could feel dissapointment flowing through my body, as I realized that it was only a dream!.

This isn't the best example or choice of words, but I tried to make it as quick and good as possible!. Just try to do it more like that!. Good luck! :)Www@QuestionHome@Com