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Question: Help with my story!.!.!. what would sound better!.!.!. ALL OPINIONS PLEASE~!!!?
ok my story is about 3 males is a love triangle!.!.!.
yes sounds gay but hear me out
one of these guys is SUPER HOT and they others both fall for him!.!.!.
one guy really likes him
and the other is just a sex freak who just wants him!.!.!. (and he has a girlfriend as well)
ok but in my story the hot guy dies buy some accident that the guy that really likes him does!.!.!.
I NEED HELP PICKING THE ACCIDENT!!!
i need it to be like something he did that accidentally made him die!.!.!.
but hears the catch!.!.!.
the "sex freak" guy actually sabotaged the death!.!.!. he was jealous of them having a good time he was the one that killed him!.!.!. but no one knoes!.!.!.
so please i really need help or ideas
just say anything!? and how you think u like my story so far!.!.!.
THANKS :) i just wanted to do something else for a change
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
cool and unique!.!.
Hmm, hot guy and luv-struck go away for the weekend and have a bit to drink in the 'cabin' that night!. They run out of booze and luv-struck begs him to go to town to get some more!. Hot guy's not keen since he's close to being over the limit!. Luv-struck insists coz he wants to implement his plan (which is while he's away he lights romantic candles and sets the place up romantically or something)!. Hot guy never makes it to town, his car veers over the cliff and he dies!. Luv-struck is beside himself with grief because he thinks it's all his fault, making him drive drunk!. Little does he know that sex-freak ran him off the road!.!.!.!.
!.!.!.!.or something!Www@QuestionHome@Com
Drugs are always an option!. Say the guy who likes the guy who died got some drugs from the sex freak guy but sex freak guy gave him the wrong stuff so the guy who likes the hot guy gave hot guy the wrong stuff!. You know, with out names this sounds really confusing but I hope you followed it!. I didn't even notice your spelling mistakes!. Don't let people hung up on the details bother you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
ok u can say that ur sex freak or watever was driving a car with black fim on it's windows !.he saw the guy to whom he wants to kill n roll te car over him several times so that he is not left to answer runs the car away n wash it so that no one knows actually who he is n also his car don't have a number!.idea is given rest u think about it how todo dear writer!.
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how about a climbing accident or a trip to the park that goes wrong!?
Lets say this park had a large hill in it that you can walk up but the top hasa cliff face, and you guessed it, sex freak gives him a little nudge!.
But when asked later, he can go oh yeah i heard he was going to the park etc etc, no i didn't go with him, been working on my car!.
You get the idea :)Www@QuestionHome@Com
Okay, I couldn't resist- i don't have a story idea for you, but your really need to learn how to spell!.!.!. You're using the wrong "here"!.!.!."hear" is listening with your ear- you should say, "here's the catch"!. There you go, that's helpful!.!.!.you'll sound much more intelligent if you use proper grammar when you call yourself a writer!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
It doesn't make any sense at all, and your spelling is horrible!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
car crash!?
sabotadged front tire, made him lose control!?!?
i dunnoWww@QuestionHome@Com
ok, random stranger!. it doesnt really make sense!. but the accident should involve the hot one dieying and was murdered by the sex freak, because he was jelous because he spent to much tim with the normal one!.
ok, random stranger, lets make names it will be easier!.
Hot One-Lee (for you stranger)
Sex Freak-Ottoway
Normal One-Mariot (unlike shes normal)
Ottaway kills lee because him and maroit are spending to much time together!. ottoway kills him by the tourcher plans given by peter, the killing therepest!. (see peter for grusem death)!.
Lee ends up haunting ottoway because he knows he killed him, but knobody believes him!. everybody thinks its DrPrem!. whom he cheated on with a couple of years back!. DrPrem is the biggest suspect and gets arested, because her house is covered in pictures of him and stuff!.!.!.
well go on from thre random stranger!. i hope your novel you are writing goes to plan!.
lots of love from you
friend, whom you have never meet!.
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Now!.!.!. as an experienced writer!.!.!.
I would tell you this:
In your story, a love scene, there ought to be 3 important links!.
1) Conflict-
I noe you already have, but in a love story, the more the conflict is not related to love, the more interesting it is (NOTE!!! it has to relate to love in the end), for example, Romeo and Julliet
2) Aspects of love-
You have to mention to your reader the reasons why others fall in love with him/her!. As in your story, you can relate the accident to the reason why that character died!.
3)Resolution-
This is the most complicated part!. You have to (according to the plot of your story so far), set up a contra-accident which resolves this accident, for example, the remaining two guys fall in love with each other after seeing their friend die before their eyes!.
That's a bit I can provide for you,
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