this is a small part of the first chapter of a story i am writing!.
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thanks so much! *PLEASE READ*** also, this story is very obviously religious!. just letting you all know so that you dont get offended and yell at me!. it makes references to heaven and hell, just with different names!. Feel free to express your discomfort at that in a CALM and dignified manner!. thanks again
Chapter One: Assignment
I woke with the sun shining on my face, as usual, hurting my eyes when I tried to open them!.
Normally, I would just groan and try to go back to sleep (which is unusual behavior for an
angel, I'll admit!.) but today was an important day, the day I'd been looking forward to since
the day I died!.
The day I received my assignment!.
The day my life on Earth ended was something that I did not think about too much because of the
disturbing memories it brought back!. That day wasn't all bad, of course!. After all, it was the day that I finally got to
The Haven, and found out that I would soon be a guardian angel!. However, the pain that it brought with it was just something I couldn't handle!.
Although I couldn't exactly feel pain anymore, at least not in the abundance that I did on Earth!. No one could hurt you here, but if you thought of something that was painful, you could still feel the pain that goes along with that thought or memory!. You could not, however, under any circumstance, feel physical pain!. At all!. Not even dizziness or ringing in the ears!.
No one knew my secret though!. I felt pain all the time, in my heart!. It was an ache, a longing!. I knew it couldn't be my heart actually hurting, in a literal sense!. So I kept it to myself!. Although I knew it was dangerous that I didn't mention this to anyone, I was too scared too!. I was afraid that I would be cast out of The Haven, the one place I loved!.
No!. I thought!. Aro would protect me!.
I sighed, relaxing a little!. Nothing could happen to me here, I was safe!.
I checked my appearance in the mirror quickly!. I looked the same as always!. My long, dark brown hair falling around my face, the dark shade and the angle of my eyebrows making my green eyes standout!. My nose was fine, I supposed; It didn't have any bumps, and for that I was extremely grateful!. My lips weren't too full or too thin, and they were always pink, ever since I was born!. I still had the same athletic, tall figure that I had on Earth!. There were a few new distinguishing features though!. I looked up at the golden halo that was now floating above my head, and then at my light blue wings that I absentmindedly flapped behind me!. This was something I did when I was nervous!. Realizing that I was too preoccupied in myself, I turned away from the mirror!. Aro had always taught us that we were to be happy with the way we were created, and that we were not to waste time fretting over our physical appearance!.
As I finally set off to the palace for the ceremony, I found myself completely immersed in my own thoughts, as I often was, and not really aware of my surroundings!. The Haven, where I now lived, was a sacred place that was detached from Earth!. It was a place where the pure of heart and the faithful went when they died!. However, dying, for those who went to The Haven, was not the end of life!. When you die, you are judged, and based on your life and actions on Earth, either go to The Haven, or to the Downworld!. I shuddered at the thought of the latter happening!. The Downworld was a place that was rarely spoke of, but everyone knew enough about it to be scared of it nonetheless!. If you are evil and wicked on Earth and if you cast faith out of your life, then you doom yourself to eternal darkness!. How awful, I thought!. To never be able to experience eternal happiness!.
I was so distracted that I didn't notice the boy behind me, and when he spoke, I was startled!.
"Nervous!?" he asked!. I jumped a little, even though I recognized the voice instantly!.
I whipped around!. "Sam! You know I'm easily scared!." I scowled at him!.
He smirked!. "That's the point, love!."
I rolled my eyes!. "Don't call me love!."He winked at me, and I couldn't help but smile slightly!.
Sam was the type of person that you just couldn't stay mad at for long, no matter how much you wanted to!.
"You still haven't answered my question, though!. Are you nervous!?" he asked, suddenly serious!.
I sighed!. "Yes, Sam!. So what if I'm a little nervous!? Its not like I'm just skipping off to school!. I-"
"Relax, love!. It wasn't a criticism!." he cut in before I could start ranting madly!. Then, with a soft chuckle, he added "I could just tell by the rather violent flapping of your wings!. You always seem to do that when you're nervous!."
I glared at him, rather irritated as I was!.
You see, Sam was kind of the hottest guy at The Haven!. Okay, he was the hottest guy in the Universe, probably!. His hair was that shade just between brown and blonde, and it looked gold in the sunlightWww@QuestionHome@Com