Read my story! :) please?

Question: Read my story! :) please!?

It has to be 55 words or less!. There is no title yet, but i hope you like it! Feel free to critique!. ya i know- wrong section but oh well!.!.!. Enjoy!

She knew she was ready!. She had the passsion and the love, but most of all, she had the lust!.

"Are you sure your ready!?" he asked

"Ready" she said doubyously!.

This would be her first time!. The moment she had been waiting for!.

He unzipped his tool bag and unscrewed her training wheels!.

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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

I loved your flash fiction! I've written ten or 15 of them and had submitted several for publication!. A few made it!.

Regardless, I've pasted your story below, but showing the correct spellings and punctuation as necessary!. Avoid inserting adverbs in your tags, such as dubiously!.

ANTICIPATION

She knew she was ready!. She had the passion and the love, but most of all, she had the lust!.

"Are you sure you're ready!?" he asked

Her attitude was dubious!. "Ready!."

This would be her first time--the moment she had been waiting for!.

He unzipped his tool bag and unscrewed her training wheels!.

End of story!. I also used "Anticipation" as a proposed title!. It's your choice!.
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It's "dubiously" not "doubyously"

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i like it alot!.!. your a really good writer!.!. i wanna read moreWww@QuestionHome@Com