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Question: Here's My newest poem it came to me last night in a dream What do you think!?
THE FLEETING

As I lay Asleep Sound in my Bed
with thoughts running wild and rampant throughout my head

I awake suddenly only to find
those words have absconded already escaped from my mind

how could this be!? where oh where have you gone!?
That poem which came unto me in such sweet lullaby dreams
tasting softly of strawberry and creams
I begin pondering

you have left me wondering

Like an Autumn tree mourning in frozen synergy as it's leaves
fall ever so swiftly to the ground

I am built up little by little unto a skillfully created
artificial mound

Only to to have the allusion realised when i awaken from the
familiarly memorable yet forgettable song

Now all that's left to say is so long so long
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Have you ever had a dream a wonderful dream full with spirtitual magnitude of
sheer loving exuberance the feeling of extreme joy because of a dream!?
Well that is what i had once long ago a dream of dancing poems flowing freely to my mind

the title the fleeting means something escapes our mind when we do not want it to
yet always will and always has, it's ephemeral, evanescent, transient, momentary and Yet how Strange
that it is We cannot incur those memories again!

The WORD absconded means to flee or run away with something or someone

An allusion is a kind of shorthand used by fiction writers to provide greater context
or meaning for the fictional situation of the novel That is what tried to get across!.








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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
i like it!.
it doesn't have the usual flow of some poems but that really doesn't matter!. all poems don't have to have cookie cutter to be good, it is all about the feeling and the words, not if it matches a certain rhythm, etc!. yes the use of absconded already escaped is repetitive but in this instance it works!. Www@QuestionHome@Com

it is original keep tryingWww@QuestionHome@Com

I like it!Www@QuestionHome@Com

I like it too!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Thank you SO MUCH for explaining the words "fleeting" and "absconded" to me!.!.!.!. and by the way, you might want to check whether you meant "allusion" or, more likely, "illusion"!.

Erm, there appears to be no consistent meter, structure or rhythm!.

It lacks any punctuation!.

"Strawberry and creams" is unnecessarily pluralised and is a clumsy, amateurish cliche!.

No apostrophe in "its!." "It's" means it is!.

"Absconded already escaped" is tautological with no apparent purpose!.Www@QuestionHome@Com