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Question: Gah! I cannot let people read what I write! What can I do about this!?
can't write when anybody is around me!. I'll ask my mom if I can get a laptop or something, or to go away when I'm writing on the computer, but then she thinks I'm looking up porno or something!. I don't let anyone read anything I write (not even my parents or best friends) But I will put up small excerpts up on the internet for people to criticize!. I think I write horribly most of the time, and people that read it will think I'm a horrid writer that wastes their time or something!. But online, as long as its copyrighted, I'll put a little!. So here some is (copyrighted):
But anyway, Ivy Willow, my best friend other than Xavier was insanely madly in love with him!. When she and Viorica walked into the doorway, I read her mind!. Nosy me, I know, but it was incredibly worth it!.
Oh my god!. He's gorgeous!. Crazily, drop dead, Edward Cullen gorgeous!. Which I totally shouldn't be saying considering I am a vamp and Edward's just in a book, but still!! It's not even 'cause he's a vamp! That's a myth! Or else I would be pretty! Oh crap, I hope he doesn't think I look like crap!. Oh my god, I do!. Oh my god!. Oh my god!. Derek, get the he!.!.!.purgatory outta my head you little idiot! If I could cuss in German I would! Stop it! I swear if you tell him I will murder you in your sleep, and you know I can 'cause I'm a vamp and that's what we do!. I'm serious, Derek!. Seriously!! Stop it!! I giggled!. Ivy was being such a girl!!! Shut up! Let me stare at him, then I'll go away!. “Fine!.” I whispered!.
And oh my god don't you dare say it sounds like twilight,!.
i know it does but the plot is entirely different!. it's just a school for vamps/werewolves/etc!. Nothing twilightish!. Twilight does not mean anything involving vamps!. That's pathetic!. Www@QuestionHome@Com
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Ok it sounded a little confusing and this is how I would put it to make more sense!.
But anyway my best friend is Ivy Willow, other than Xavier, and she was insanely, madly in love with him!. When she and Viorica walked into the doorway, I read her mind!. Nosy me, I know, but it was incredibly worth it!.
*I would put this in italics that way you can tell its Ivy's thoughts!.* Oh my god!. He's gorgeous!. Crazy, drop dead, Edward Cullen gorgeous!. Which I totally shouldn't be saying considering I am a vamp, and Edward's just in a book, but still!! I like him even though vampyres aren't really all beautiful!. Or else, I would be pretty! Oh crap, I hope he doesn't think I look horrible!. Oh my god, I do!. Oh my god!. Derek, get the he** (purgatory!?) outta' my head you little idiot! If I could cuss you out in German, I would! Stop it! I swear if you tell him, I will murder you in your sleep!. You know I can 'cause us vampyres get thirsty (the use of the word vamp too much kind of gets annoying) once in a while and that's what we do!. I'm serious, Derek!. Seriously!! Stop it!!
I giggled!. *again I would put in italics to show thought*Ivy was being such a girl!!!
*same here*Shut up! Let me stare at him, then I'll go away!.
“Fine!.” I whispered!.
Your writing is really good you should definitly write more!. I am also a writer and I recommend getting an account at http://www!.writing!.com/ its a great place to get feedback on your writing from other authors just like us!. You can get a free membership easily and there are tons of activities and applications that get the creative writing juices flowing!.
For the thing with your mom!. You can show her your membership on writing!.com when you get one, to show her your commited to writing and not just doing whatever!. Even ask her for money for a paid membership would show that commitment!. Www@QuestionHome@Com
You just need to write more and get over the whole not letting your best friends read it!. You need more than one view point of your book so find a friend who won't lie to you about what you've written!.
If you're going to post an excerpt from the story, give a little background about what the story is about or at least what has happened up to that point!. You have some grammatical problems, but your voice is unique and good!. Www@QuestionHome@Com