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Position:Home>Books & Authors> Is this a good start for the 1st chapter of a book ?Question: Is this a good start for the 1st chapter of a book !? This is from the moms pov!.
I've seen al the medical shows where a kid gets rushed into the hospital!. I thought that it would never be my kid!.,My son, my baby!. My world went dark when i got a call form my husband telling me my only son Brandon was rushed to the hospital!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: I think that that third sentence needs to be more disconnected like the first two run with that train of thought thing!. ie: I've seen all those medical shows where a kid gets rushed to the hospital!. I never thought it would be my kid!. My son, my baby!. My world went black when I got the call!. My husband telling Brandon was rushed to the hospital!. My only child!. Like all those others in the shows!. I feel numb!. just my suggestion frum the disconnected train of thought from the first 2 sentencesWww@QuestionHome@Com I think its a good start!. It could almost be the preface for the book tho!. If it's not the preface, then I think you should add more information!. If it was the preface, it would be the preface for a book when the child/mother/father is recovering from the accident, etc!.Www@QuestionHome@Com it all depends on the type of writer you are, it seem that you are writing this book as if it is being looked back upon, or that it was in the past!. But it seems pretty good to me, its hard to really know when it is only one paragraph but keep going with it, don't give up you may have to restart the book a couple of times as i had to but with mine, but don't get discouraged!. Www@QuestionHome@Com It's a bit repetitive saying 'rushed (in)to the hospital' in the beginning and the end!. 'My world went dark' is a little clee-sha!. The 'my kid, my son, my baby' is nice!. Good idea for start on the idea front!.Www@QuestionHome@Com The opening is dynamic and immediately casts the reader into the story!. Good job!. = ] I actually visualized myself in the situation!. Continue to work with the momentum you have started!. Good Luck!.Www@QuestionHome@Com It's okay for a first draft!. If you want to write a book, just write it!. Figuring out the best way to start it is for when you get to editing the book/creating your second draft!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Try to outline who, what, where, when!.!.!.etc!. a bit more!. Y'know, define the setting!. Other than that, however, it sounds pretty good!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Sounds interesting! (:Www@QuestionHome@Com yeah thats a pretty good start probally something i'd read good luckWww@QuestionHome@Com yes! i like it!. Www@QuestionHome@Com yesWww@QuestionHome@Com yeah sounds cool!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com |