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Question: I'm moving into Mermaid Romance/Erotica, what do you think!? For MATURE readers!?
The following contains explicit imagery of an adult nature, language has been watered down to fit CG's, but it's still a little provocative!. Be warned:
With one hand on his rock hard member and the other searching desperately for a port of entry he broke true love's kiss and looked confused, yet longingly into Seraphim's eyes!. "Where do I put it!?" He asked between gentle strokes on his throbbing spear!. She purred sing-song through the water, lightly tickled the head of his shaft and laid her fluorescent orange eggs across the sea floor with a twitter of ecstasy, and moan of release!. "Spill your seed over them," she sang to him across the sea, "And we'll have a legion of young!" Desperately he reached for one of her pert breasts and picked up the motion of stroking that he'd grown all too familiar with as a lonely deep sea fisherman, and thought 'Aw, for goodness sake!.!.!.!.'
Well, what do you guys think!? Will I be able to make the transition from the children's morality market to the convenience store romance section!? And, do you like the scene!? Helpful comments certainly welcome!. I'm sort of new to mermaid romance/erotica!.!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Vet, you are a multi-talented genius!. How anyone can make such a transition from children and YA to romance is beyond me, but you, sir, pull it off flawlessly!. Who knew that mermaids would make such a perfect subject for a romance novel!? I think this would be a best-seller at the convenience store in only a matter of days after publication!.
I had a friend, skilled in the writing of mermaid erotica, read this over and she would like to point out that Seraphim is a male mermaid's name, not a female!. She suggests replacing it with something such as Ariela or Lilayn or Monyata, or any other female name!. Otherwise, it is very good (and accurate!); the scene is excellent, very graphic but described in such a poetic manner as to be beautiful!. Are you sure you've never written in this genre before!?
(Not to sound too picky, but I think you should look this over for comma/capitalization in the dialogue!.)
You, my friend, have a gift!. Www@QuestionHome@Com
The writing is good, but some of the dialogue is a bit shifty!. Why mermaid erotica!?Www@QuestionHome@Com
Hilarious!. Thanks for the laugh :)Www@QuestionHome@Com