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The Canadian Tenors review!.
Written by ____,
Oct!. 4th, 2008

The four tenors (Remigo Pereira, Fraser Walters, Jamie McKnight and Victor Micallef)
Described as “a national treasure” preformed their mix of opera, pop opera, classical and contemporary pieces, sung in French, Portuguese, Spanish, Italian, even Maltese at ________ on October 4th 2008!.Their performance was outstanding, their ability to harmonize was what caught my attention the most!. How their voices complemented each other rather than one taking over the show was also very nice!. The incorporation of comedy between songs lightened the mood of some of the heavy pieces, Frasier Walters even made a reference to _____ recalling her singing with him at the opening of a Vancouver hockey rink!.
However, I did not like when they added their own lyrics to the songs, I believe the originals were much better!. I was also irritated when during a song they switched languages - going to from such a smooth language (i!.e!., Italian) to a less flowing one (English) which changed the speed and mood of the song!.

Overall rating 9!.5/10



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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
First, you have some grammar/spelling mistakes: The tenors performed, not preformed!. The plural Tenors does not agree with the singular 'A national Treasure!." Described is capped in the first sentence when it shouldn't be!. In the last para, 'I did not like when' doesn't makes sense!. You need "I did not like it when" for grammatical sense, but that brings me to point,
2) You have a lot of awkward phrasing!. As in 'Their ability to harmonize was what caught my attention most," and " I did not like when !. !. !."!. You have run-on sentences, such as the first one!. You want to replace awkward phrasing with smoother phrasing: "Their performance was outstanding, in particular, their ability to harmonize!."

3) Never use "very nice!." It's completely meaningless!. also, try to avoid the verb 'was' and get something more vigorous!. "The way their voices blended into a unified sound created a !. !. !." unique tonal effect, a richer aural experience etc!. Www@QuestionHome@Com