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Question: Is this a good story line for a book!?
It's about a girl named Lizzy and she finds out her boyfriend is

cheating on her!. She breaks up with him and she goes anorexic

because she thinks the reason he cheated on her was because she

wasn't good enough!. Her best friend Mia helps her through it and so

does Mia's older brother, Jared!. Jared has always been like and older,

mean, brother to Lizzy!. So hime helping Lizzy is a surprise!. Lizzy's

parents are going through a divorce so there is a lot of drama!. At the

end Jared explains to Lizzy that he had liked Lizzy for a long time but

hadn't realized it until she started to go out with Aaron!. Lizzy's parents

become friends and it all turns out AWESOME!

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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
This isn't a bad story line!. Certainly you want to avoid it being overlooked as just another tean soap opera style story, though!.

So, what you could do is plan out a good plot outline first, check out suite101!.com for tips, and really dig deep and give the characters individuality and well, !.!.!. character!.

I like the car crash idea, it adds a little action and drama!.

I've always enjoyed stories where the male friend, neighbor or best friend's brother falls for the, suddenly attractive, main character!.

There is nothing wrong with the name lizzy, but I do like unique names and I often check out baby books or sites for names and there are sites like parenting!.com that you can usually search for names by meaning!.

It always sucks to be cheated on and its a good way to give the character a reason for developing the disorder, and I like that she also has the parent issues going on aswell, you may wanna throw a couple other teen drama issues in there to push her over the edge though, but while trying to not get too cliche!.

I'm a fool for the good old happy endings, but these days people are hoping for a plot twist that will make them go, Ohhhh, at the end, or even flip back through the pages to see if they missed something!.

Maybe build up the couples relationship first so the reader can relate to the pain of finally realizing he's not faithful, and leave little hints that might make her question his loyalty before the big discovery!. also hints about the bff's brother liking her too, or references to the past, to make them more real!.

A good addition might be making it so the other woman seems like a totally dislikable character at first, but later we find out she didn't even know he was in a relationship, and in the end "lizzy" and her form a friendship aswell!. Thats just an idea though!.

It's always a good idea to read similar books too, so you can get a feal for the flow, while of course NOT stealing or borrowing material! And do your homework on the disorder and car accidents and anything else that may need research to sound believable!. One of the worst things that can cause a readers interest to go limp is if they start questioning the plot holes, like why werent cops called, why didnt the parents show up at the hospital, or I thought the car was totalled in the crash, how are they driving to the blah blah blah!. you get the point!.


Well hope this helped a little!.

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Its a good story Plot and its quite creative !. But I would have it end wit the fact that her parents can put there differences aside and make Lizzy happy!. But they still have that conflict between them that is still there!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

It seems a bit predictable!. And the ending is way to story-book!. But then again, everyone loves a happy ending!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

you can't take anyone seriously with a name like Lizzy!.!.!. and there should be a twist to it!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

kind of typical!.!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com