This is a small part of a story I am writing!. I was just wondering if it was interesting at all!? Be as honest as you like- I know it is not too good but I just thought some constructive critcism would be good!. Thanks
The tar was hot under Savannah's bare feet, as she rolled back and forth on her heels!. She was nervous!. She was procastinating!. This was it; time to face the music!. But Savannah didn't want to, she wanted to stay outside with the summer wind blowing her thick brown hair around her face and lifting her yellow sundress above her knees!. Savannah wanted to turn around and go back!. Back to Robbie, back to safety!. But she couldn't!. She'd burnt that bridge and now it was time to face her father's wrath!.
Ironic, she thought, that when I've finally done the right thing I'm still going to be punished!. Yet all those months of rule-breaking and no consequences!.
A door in the house behind where Savannah stood aimlessly banged open and shut with unnecessary force, cutting through her reverie!. Breathing in deeply, Savannah stepped further across the road and made her way into a future that was so much different to her past!. It was time to let go!.
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