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Question: So what do you think of my story idea!?
This is a summary of my story idea:

Genevieve Laroche is a feisty, independent (seventeen-year-old) character with an eye for jewels, woodwork and skilled crew!. She is handy with weaponry such as swords, guns, canons, bows and arrows!. She was brought up in England (where she was born in 1807) by her rich father after her mother died during birth!. Ever since she could walk she showed a liking for action and adventure!. Genevieve always hated dresses, typical femeninity and acceptable decorum!. Finally tiring of the expectations and mockery, she fled her home at the tender age of fourteen to become a pirate!. She worked as a servant on a ship for two years before a raid on that particular crew!. She showed obvious talent during the battle using a carving knife in each hand; the cook had been training her behind the captain's back!. The captain recognised this and welcomed her onto his ship to serve as a pirate trainee!. She served there for 6 months before returning to shore to (under disguise) find a suitable crew!. She then commandeered a government ship and has been a force to be reckoned with ever since!.

- This is where the story begins, the history of her is explained later -

One day after a successful robbery, her ship is attacked by her own father's patrol!. During battle she is recognised by her father and upon return to her home land she is sent through time as a punishment, as the land is rich and ripe with magic!. In the modern world, she must learn to adapt to life in the 21st century while countring down the days for her return!.

N!.B!.

1!. I am 13!.
2!. This is all a summary!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
The idea certainly has potential, although your character sounds some what like a Mary-Sue!. Sorry :(
She has many traits such as being good with weapons, 'rebellious princess syndrome', 'feisty'ness and a dead parent!.
Now I'm not saying that your idea is bad; on the whole, it's pretty good, although I think you should flesh out your main character a little more!. If you haven;t already done so, give her some bad traits, and please, don't make her outstandingly beautiful!
All in all, definitely keep writing as it's a very promising idea :)Www@QuestionHome@Com

It sounds really good, but i think you would have to write it in the third person but still from that charaters point of veiw!.( no i's or me's) (e!.g Genevieve packedher bags and left that night, she didn't want to leave her father but she could take the critisums no more) hope this helped!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

That sounds really interesting! It probably wouldn't intrest me a whole lot, but I still like it!

PS Thanks for answering mine :)!.Www@QuestionHome@Com