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September 12th 2006

The air was misty as I walked down the streets!.

It was then when I saw one of them!.

Their blood curdling screeches made my ears pound!.

I wasn't going to become one of them!.

It won't happen!.

I won't become a heartless monster!.

I'm not like that!.

I want my old life back!.

Why did I do what I did!?

Why am I me!?

I have too much questions!.

The monster walked towards me!.

I couldn't move!.

Paralyzed!.

Dang!.

"Get away!." I screamed but the words came out gibberish!.

The monster walked closer!.

"You can't run away!."

Yes I can!.!.I'm just not capable right now!. I thought

"haha!.!.you always were a funny one!.!." he hissed!.

Snake much!?!?

"Don't fool around!.!." he spoke slowly!.

I was suddenly able to move now!.

The monster lunged at me pinning me to the ground!.

He strangled me till I couldn't breathe!.

Suddenly a dog figure took over the monster!.

The dog was a wolf!.!.a white one!.

I couldn't believe it!.

I don't believe in any of this! I protested in my mind

The wolf looked at me then devoured the monster!.

I almost puked!.

The wolf looked up and flicked the blood of it white mane!.

Suddenly, About 4 other wolf came behind the white one!.

I bent in to pet it!.

It saved my life it must be a nice dog!.

A black wolf almsot took my arm off!.

"Ah!" I squealed!.

I looked back at my car and ran towards it!.

The wolf all ran behind me!. I didn't look back!.

I reached my car the door wasn't opening!.

I looked behind me to see death before my eyes!.

!.!.!.!.!.!.It can't be!.!.!.!.!.

"Jacob!.!.!." I whispered!.

He put his finger to my mouth!.

"No time to explain!.!.!.Follow me!." he motioned!.

Behind him was 2 woman and 2 men!.

They were all gorgeous!.

"No!.!." I nodded my head!.

"Follow me now Brichelle!.!" he shouted!.

"No!. I don't even know what you are!." I yelled finally able to open my car door!.

"Brichelle listen to me! Do you want to get into anymore trouble then your already in!?"

"What trouble!?" I asked!.

"You do not want to know!."

"Why!?"

He grabbed my wrist and tugged me!.

"William!.!.!." Jacob handed me over to a man with brown hair over his blue eyes that sparkled!.

He took me into his arms!.

"Who are you!?" I asked!.

"Your worst nightmare!." He mumbled as we followed the others!.

"Let me go!" I suddenly shrieked!.

He looked in my eyes then looked away!.

"No! Let Go!" I yelled!.

We reached a black eclipse and he placed me in!.

A woman holding me down until they closed the car door!.

"Ahh! Jacob what's going on!" I yelled as the man forced a seatbelt on me!.

"Shut up!.!.I mean Be quiet just calm down!." he responded his eyes on the road as he drove!.

"What's going on!" I shrieked again!.

"I cannot be calm I'm being kidnapped!"

One of the woman looked at me!.

She had pale skin and wavy crimson hair!.

"Your the one they call Brichelle!." she said!.

"Yes!.!.Who are you!?" I asked!. She looked familar!.

"Jill Branch!." She said holding her hand out with a friendly smile!.

I shook her hand then looked down!.

"You miss your family already!.!." she murmmered like she didn't want anyone to hear!.

"Yeah!.!." I whispered!.

"You'll be home soon!." she smiled!.

"Where are we going!?" I asked as we enetered the highway!.

"The airport!." she said!.

The other woman looked younger with blonde hair with black streaks!.

She smiled!.

"We're going to Massachusetts!." She smiled again!.

I gave her a blank look!.

"I'm Leeha!." she smiled!.

I blinked twice!.

"Mass!.!.A!.!.Chu!.!.!.Setts!?" I cracked my voice!.

They both nodded!.

I looked at the rest of the guys they all were having their own conversation!.

I gulped!.

What have I gotten myself into!.!.!.!.!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
It sounds interesting but I would like to know why there going to massachusetts and what are they going to do there!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

you're a pretty good writer!. i'd read it!. this is prolly the longest "would you read my story" post that i've read on here!. it had some similarites to twilight that i didn't really like just cuz i'm tired of that but it was good!.Www@QuestionHome@Com