Could you read and review the first four chapters of my story?

Question: Could you read and review the first four chapters of my story!?

I know it's long, but I 'd be sooo appreciative if you would read it!. Just reading the first chapter is good, but if you read all the chapters and tell me what you think, you're guaranteed the ten points
-Livvy
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Not bad, it felt a little rushed!. Maybe go into a little more detail on the setup of the school!. Do the badges the students have any other meaning other then the characteristics of each student!? I liked the familiar idea, maybe you can go into more detail about their meeting, I'm getting the feeling Elandomin is going to be one of the main characters, right!? But interesting story, i'd like to read more of it!. Might wanna run the story in Microsoft Word to correct misspellings!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Did you write the story
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