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Question: This is my first short-story/rant I've written in my journal! Do you see any writer-potential here!? Maybe if I!?
practice a lot more!? Thanks

"Low battery!" cries a flashing light on the bottom right corner of my computer screen!. Well it only seemed like it was screaming hysterically because I knew that if I didn't get that plug into that damn outlet during heart-racing countdown of 20-or-so seconds, I would have to restart my computer, wasting about a good 10 minutes of my life for absolutely no respectable reason!. As I dashed to the outlet- also in terror by the look on its face- I saw and searched but saw only darkness!. A thickness of cloud, strangely dense!. It was under my bed!. Plug-Go-In!. This angle!. That angle!. Shove!. Shove!. Shove!. Goddamnit how hard can it be to match three sticks with three holes!? I imagine, at this point, if sex is this diffucult in the dark!. No possible way!. Sexual organs are like magnets to eachother, knowing eachothers' locations by thhe gravity of lust!.!.!.

I was just ranting and barely any editing as I copied it onto here!. Maybe it sucks but I don't know! Do you see any potential for me in creative writing!? I am generally a creative person in every other area and I thought maybe I should take up writing!. Thanks soo much to those who help :)Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
yes!.
I read your story without getting bored!.
perhaps you need some honing and practice, but there is some talent
there which will come out if you keep at it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

this is really good!.!.!.!.please write more!.!.!.it's amusing and i didn't get bored
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yes!.!.!.very much!.!.!.i can imagine u being jk rowling or s meyerWww@QuestionHome@Com

You do have potential and I believe by practicing you will get better!.

The best editor is often you!. Read it back to yourself--out loud--and see if it flows!.

This part makes no sense:
"As I dashed to the outlet- also in terror by the look on its face- I saw and searched but saw only darkness!. A thickness of cloud, strangely dense!. It was under my bed!."

Don't change subjects within a paragraph!.

These things you will learn with time and practice!.Www@QuestionHome@Com