I wrote this children's story, what do you think?

Question: I wrote this children's story, what do you think!?

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If you think it's not appropriate for kids, just remember!. It's no worse than the kind of things Christian kids learn from the Bible!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

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hi i don't know if this is answering your question but if u want to write stories and have people tell u if its good and other stuff like that u should go on http://www!.webook!.com/!. its cool!. Www@QuestionHome@Com

ooooo!
that was so good!
i would advise you to write more then
try to get a book published!
oh i found it so wonderful!
eek! i write myself but i like it!.!.!.!.a lot!

congrats on your story it was absolutely magnificent!
sorry but i can't hold myself back! and the words were not too long to me and that's what writers do! is be great at what they do!.!.!.!.eek i did it again!.!.!.!.oh wellit was great!Www@QuestionHome@Com

It's a good idea to read aloud to younger children or to a group!. It's great for that purpose, and you could write a few of these and put them in a book, and I could see how it would work!. On behalf of myself and all of www!.bestbooks4ever!.com, good luck with this story and others (-:Www@QuestionHome@Com

I can tell that it's not a very happy story, write a story about frolicking faries, that should even things out!!:)Www@QuestionHome@Com

Its good!.!. Good moral!. Maybe too much vocab for children!. Id aim the story at like 12 yr olds!. Reminds me of a Greek myth!. Almost a legend!. But I like it!Www@QuestionHome@Com

I think it's quite good!. Maybe for a little bit of an older kid type thing!. Lots of the words they may not understand!. Great use of your imagination!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Use smaller words remember they are childrenWww@QuestionHome@Com

Hey,

I love it! It's really good and sounds great for children! Keep writing, your very creative :)

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i thought it was amazing!. very good!Www@QuestionHome@Com

i think it greatWww@QuestionHome@Com