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Question: What do you think of my poem about Edward and Bella!?
I had to write a sonnet for creative writing class!. It may sound a bit weird in some spots,just because I had a hard time getting the right amount of syllables and rhyming!.I would really appreciate any suggestions on how to make it better,if you have any!. So please tell me what you think!. Here it is:

Edward Cullen,seventeen forever
Bella Swan, seventeen for just a year!.
A relationship that will never sever!.
But cant exist without danger or fear!.
Edward is very much a vampire!.
Drinking the blood of his innocent prey
Yet,hes still the object of her desire!.
The odd couple met on a normal school day
In the rainy town of Forks,Washington!.
With many siblings hes never alone!.
Alice,Emmett and Rosalie Cullen
Soon,Bella's skin will also feel like hard stone!.
She will soon join their complicated life
And marry dear Edward and be his wife!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
haha! its cute! oh, and i love orlando bloom more!.!.!. lol!. its hard to find his fans nowadays!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

It's missing intrigue and a story!. But other than that, I feel like you did a good job!. Your brief explanations could leave a reader confused, though!. Overall, nice work!:]Www@QuestionHome@Com

I really like it!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

its srt of not really good butlike atleast u tried to rite 1 but 4 me it just didn suitWww@QuestionHome@Com