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Question: Please read my poem/lyrics and give me feedback!?
It's about a friendship where one person wants a little more!. The other person doesn't feel the exact way about them but gives them what they want sexually because they feel guilty!. Based off a story I read!.

Let's ruin every song
And we'll show them what it's like to fake love!.
So tell me how does it feel,
To be everything I want and all that I need!?
How does it feel to be stuck in this lovesick tragedy!?
You could be the saddest song I ever wrote,
white your face screams the saddest story I'd ever seen!.

You make me cry guilty
And I'll scream out to the world, if I could
Please, for once, let's not regret a single thing!.
Oh, just for once, let's not ruin a single song,
for just tonight!. Don't regret a thing!.

Dark blue seems just a little darker in your eyes!.
We'll take it by surpise, everything ended!.
Every unspoken word scarrs the masterpeice we could've been!.!.
This truly was the "death of beauty"

We share love, hate, pain and tears!.
I'm so sorry I'm so selfish!.


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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Wow! That was really sad! The emotion is very raw and real, you have a real talent for that! I enjoyed it a lot! It reminds me of Eponine from Les Miserables!.Www@QuestionHome@Com