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Question: I'm writing a book!. Read these few paragraphs!. Would you read this book!?
Hey, I'm just thinking, and this came into mind, so, would you read the rest of this book!? I came up with this much in 10 minutes!. Maybe I could write more Thanks :)
FRANCES MICHELLE
Chapter One
She stared off to the lake, standing on the pier, Alone!.
She stared off to the lake, remembering herself, not Alone!.
“Almost Poetic” Thought Frances!.
She was laying in bed, staring at her calendar showing beautiful lakes!. The month that it was showing, was July!. It showed a lonely, rotten wooden pier!. She didn’t know where the poem came from!. She definitely knew she wasn’t a ‘poetic’ type of person!. Definitely not!.
Frances struggled to get up from bed, she almost half-pleaded with herself to get up!. Her body refused such an offer!. Finally, she got up, put her feet on the warm-almost-sticky hard wood floor!. She turned off the fan in her bedroom, that she kept on medium speed during the hot, humid summer nights in Chicago Illinois!., and decided to go downstairs and find out if her Mother or Grandparents were awake yet!. She did not know the time yet; her alarm clock had not worked for over a month, for reasons unknown!.
She thought it must be in the morning, because she woke up from the sunshine streaming into her present bedroom that used to be her Mothers!. She knew the window was facing east, towards the lake, in which the sun would rise!. And, that would be, around Nine in the morning!.
At least, that is what her Mother told her!.
As she staggered down the stairs, past the front door, through the living-room, (by this time she could hear her Mother’s and Grandmothers usual fussing) and finally came into the kitchen, where a familiar scene in her life played!. Her Grandmother and Mother, leaning against the counters, drinking coffee and orange juice!. Her Grandmother was in her Bathrobe, and her Mother, was already dressed up, ready to go out to her office, do some research, and find out which country her family would move to next!.
“Well you’re finally up!” Said Frances’s Mother!.
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I love it!. Maybe you can provide MORE information about the girl because at the end of the paragraphs I was wondering is this a boy or a girl!? But I really enjoyed it!. I am wondering though, is this a horror book, a comedy book, or an action book or a children's books!? You got me hooked, please finish it and I think you did a great job!. I was a little lost at the beginning but I thought it was f a b u l o u s ! ! 1!. Thing that is good when writing a book is giving details when they're walking or doing anything, but not TOO many details for example: She sat at her wooden desk that had a black desktop on it, a purple pencil, and a blue eraser with stars on it, because no one CARES about a blue eraser with stars on it, they want to get more into the story!. But I loved how you said in your book "Finally, she got up, put her feet on the warm-almost-sticky hard wood floor!." I loved how you put warm-almost-sticky hard wood floor!. That was great! Not too much details!. And about writing it!. You don't want to edit it WHILE writing it because it kind of ruins it, but I thought you did a good job and there weren't alot of punctual or other issues with it!.
GREAT JOB!!!
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its good, but could use some work!. the detailsare a little exaggerated and stuff like that can make for a boring book, but for 10 minutes work it was great!. i could really picture everything in the story! :)Www@QuestionHome@Com
I'm caught by the beginning part which is good!.!.!.
and I like the small sentences such as "Definitely not!." and how brief and to the point!.!.
it's a little obscure but I LOVE it :)Www@QuestionHome@Com
yeah it sounds pretty good :) i would prolly read it just need to know a little more about it!.!.!.keep writting theres definatly something there!!Www@QuestionHome@Com
good but some words arent necessary, like IllinoisWww@QuestionHome@Com
It sounds really good!. I would definitely pick it up and read it (and I am a picky reader, I don't look for new authors much)!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Yeah!.!.it sounded really good!.!.!.I would read it! and to tell the truth i don't read allot so good job!Www@QuestionHome@Com
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It would help to know where you are going with this!.!.!.what sort of genre are you going for!?Www@QuestionHome@Com
She!.!.!.,she!.!.!., she!.!.!.
What's it supposed to be about!?Www@QuestionHome@Com
thats good! and i dont even like to read! somuch detail!Www@QuestionHome@Com