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Hopefully all of you have read my What do u think of my book idea question!.

In the beginning of the book Brittnee and her mom are mourning the “death” of Brittnee’s older brother Sean!. Who for several weeks had gone missing and the police never found a body!. Brittnee who is depressed by her brothers death is sent to a boarding school called “Sacred Heart Academy ” (based on Idyllwild Arts Academy and Miss!. Porter’s School for Girls)!. At first Brittnee seems to have no friends, everyone just kind of ignores her!. Until the popular Jesyka Phelps invites Brittnee to a Club party where Jesyka slipped vodka into the soda, after she starts acting like a fool she is ushered out by a her roommates Cheyenne Rebecca Anderson and Hannah Joni Alvey who are hesitant to go back into the party when Brittnee says she can walk back to the dorm!. On the way back Brittnee steps without looking into the middle of the street and is pulled back by the charming mysterious Riku Gordon Connor, who tells Brittnee that she should look where she is going and leads her back to her dorm!. Later in the book it is revealed that Sean left with Riku(who is a vampire/demon and a lord) to find the (number) Ladies who together can save the world from total distruction!.

Brittnee is a witch, princess and the MAIN MAIN character of the series!. She has the elemental power of light, invisibility, and empathy

Sean is the newest member of the Zenx and third in command after Riku!. He has the power of lightning and has Telekinesis(Ability to manipulate and control objects with the mind, often in ways not visible to the naked eye)

Riku is a (vampire/demon) and is the second in command of Zenx!. He has the power of darkness, Super reflexes, Super senses, super strength, Night vision, which is normal demon powers!.











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Didn't I already answer this!? And the other one!? Did you delete the question!? Or did I type all that out and not send!? Oh gosh, I hope not!. Well I'll type it again!.
I think that your changes are good, but I really hope you didn't change because of the criticism you received!. I like the whole Zenx idea, and it makes more sense than just a random vampire (because publishers won't take them anymore and he now has a motive)!. Though I think that the princesses, vampires, princes, witches, and demons WITH superpowers is a bit much!. Maybe just demons and witches with superpowers with a secret society and a certain type of people (the "Princesses" without that term "Princess") to save them!. I like the idea, but not the term, you know!. You don't want to make it corny!.
Which brings me to names!. I think that you should use more common spellings and names to make the story more realistic and easier to relate to!. But that's my opinion, and it doesn't count for much!. Just write for fun, not for fame and fortune, and you'll enjoy it more, thus producing a much better story!. And don't listen to what people (including me) have to say, unless they can back it up!.
Thanks for adding me, btw!. I usually thank people in e-mail but you don't allow it!. I think I must've answered, else you wouldn't have added me!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

i didn't read your first question, but so far this seems like a good idea for a book!. You should write more!. In just that short summary you got my attention, I think you should keep at it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com