Please review my short story?

Question: Please review my short story!?

this is a short story that i wrote for english class last year!. i know i'm not a genius writer, or even close to it (heh), and that my writing probably sounds like a little kid wrote it (which is true), but i want to improve!. so constructive criticism would be greatly appreciated!? :) here's the link:

http://dog-was-star!.blogspot!.com/2008/07!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

I actually thought it was really good!. ^^ Especially since you're so young!.

The mom's ghost thing kind of struck me by surprise, and I think the story would have been just as good without her!. Maybe you could do something to make the single event less random; maybe Lilly has "seen" her mom before or something!. It just came out of nowhere and didn't fit!.

Maybe I'm just too cynical, but I knew from the beginning that Gladys would take Lilly's earrings!.Www@QuestionHome@Com