Rate my new novel. Just started. called Cold Fire: broken window?

Question: Rate my new novel!. Just started!. called Cold Fire: broken window!?

The novel itself is a fantasy young adult!. and it is currently in progress!. I need feedback from readers!. Thanks

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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

The first sentence is an example of lazy description!. "Extremely" is not a strong word to use in this situation!. What is confusing is that you go into vivid imagery in the following sentences, but use one describing word in the first sentence!. Description isn't a hook, unless it is perfected!.

The first chapter, I don't really know what's going on!. In the first part you need to have the problem, main character, settings (which you do)

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it was alright!.
Try being a little more clear!. Like the first line!. The trees were glimmering b/c of the reflection!.
What reflection!?
and idk if i would use glimmering!. it sounds a little childish!.
But it realy wasn't to bad!.
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its good, i would expand the first chapter to make it clearer though!. Good work so far!.Www@QuestionHome@Com