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the crimson and gold that consumes all the green I have waved my last summer goodbye I have gazed upon my last October sky all of my autumns have passed away for now it is winter, and forever it will stayWww@QuestionHome@Com Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: I love the imagery of "the crimson and gold/ that consumes all the green" !.!.!.it has a sense of life slowing down just as the change of season has slowed to a slumbering hue!. It conjures the image of leaves turning color and trees standing stark and bare!. Your next two lines make such a dramatic shift in tone that I was caught unaware until I read "I have gazed upon my last October sky / all of my autumns have passed away!." There is such finality in your words!. I feel sad, lost and unsure of why the poet must say goodbye!. What tragedy has transpired, something that I am not allowed to share!? "For now it is winter, and forever it will stay!." There is no sadness in the voice of the poet, the voice is sure and certain!. The words are spoken matter-of-fact and there is no request to pity or to mourn!. It's sad but so strong!. I love it!. Thanks for sharing!.Www@QuestionHome@Com I don't like it!. It is too normal!. You don't have to tell us that autumn leaves look crimson and gold, we already know that!. The end is too flowery because you didn't have enough different, unique imagery before it!. But I like your tone, just improve a couple of areas!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Excellent!. It has a very good image of death and finality, and I can actually visualize the seasons changing from reading your poem!. A good metaphor!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Pretty Awesome!. It sort of reminds me of the poem "Fire and Ice" By Robert Frost!. Keep it up, if posibble!.!.!.!. :P ??Libby??Www@QuestionHome@Com A little too conservative & robert frosty for my taste but I guess it's well written and has a nice rhyme scheme!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com its amazing!. its really nice!. good theme and metre!. but i think the word "last" shudnt be used twice in a short poem!.Www@QuestionHome@Com i like it, good concept, works well from beginning to end yeah, its good :)Www@QuestionHome@Com i like robert frost and it kinda sounds like him!. i think it is awesome!. keep writing more!.Www@QuestionHome@Com I like it!. It's very good!. Keep it up!Www@QuestionHome@Com yeah it's nice!.!.!. but i really don't get the meaning!. :[Www@QuestionHome@Com |