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Question: Critique A Chapter In My Story!?
Alright, well I'm writing a mystery novel!. It's about a young detective named Brooklyn Sommers who's younger sister, Marilyn was kidnapped!. She is trying to catch the culprit with all her heart and soul until finally she recieves a note that tells her to come to a Masquerade Ball to meet him (The kidnapper)!. She arrives, and she recieves a message from him that instructs her to go to a Hotel room upstairs (It is being held at a Five-Star, extremely fancy-like Hotel called the Grand Estate Hotel) and they end up fighting to what seems like will be to the death!. I just wrote the 19th chapter entitled "Forget", and I wanted an opinion on it!. It's a bit long, so be patient!. Coming in the next post!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
It wasn't long!. lol!. It was great! You should always remember that each character gets his/ her own paragraph, though!.
Descriptions were nice too but you don't need to over-elaborate!. We all know what a hotel room looks like!.!.!.even a five-starred one!.
If you want to get more (and better) reviews, go to writing!.com!. It's free and professional writers are also members there but they only post published works!.
click on the "make a book" then post your novel chapter by chapter!. I'll be glad to help you!. My username is tepishane_13!.
-tepishane-
P!.S!.
Post the 20th chapter there, okay!? I would be more than happy to review it again for you!. Thanks!
Good luck on your novel!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
ok i love writing storys and i try writting books but i cant get past the first chapter i loved your story and would like any advice you can give me !. I posted some of my writings on yahoo a couple of ins ago i would love it if you can go and read them and tell me what you think!. or you can email me at sos25z63841@gmail!.com thank you so muchWww@QuestionHome@Com
awesome
that is so well written!. its better than some published books ive read,
id love to read the wholee book,
its sounds like an interestin story line as well
all together I LOVE ITWww@QuestionHome@Com