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March is considered the month of change!. As the world erupts in color and hibernation ends spring becomes victorious over winter!. In between marveling at the novelty of the first hints of spring and anticipating winters close, we busy ourselves with a multitude of activities!. As a result March often leaves as quickly as it arrived!.
Different from the past two months March hosts a wide variety of holidays and activities!. We began by receiving an extra hour do to Daylight savings!. This is celebrated by children who love staying up later and adults who enjoy basking in the sun’s glow longer than the day before!. On the seventeenth we participate in St Patrick’s Day!. The way people acknowledge their pride for Ireland is as diverse as the array of birds at the feeder!. Some prefer going out and chatting with friends while others are content with a quiet dinner with their family!. Even nature fills a requirement by painting the grass with an emerald hue!.
As the weather becomes more tolerable the sun allows its rays to shine upon the earth, which disintegrates the frozen white snow revealing wet green grass!. Soon the first tiny leaves emerge fully convinced that spring’s gentle embrace will never vanish!. As the days lengthen birds magically appear vanquishing the lonely silence winter placed over the earth!. As March nears its end the bird’s sweet melody begins to coks the first flowers to push a few minute leaves through the dirt, to relish in the suns endless heat!.
With the exception of a holiday the days of March blur together until suddenly the end is upon us!. The changes this month brought us stopped the endless amounts of boredom!. As our thoughts shift from leprechauns and shamrocks to Easter eggs and baskets March is quickly forgotten!. But not for long, for soon when those cold winter days are upon us we shall yearn for the change and exciment and of March!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I like it, but it may shift topics too quickly!.

There are a few punctuation and grammar mistakes, but easy to fix!.

Are you going to properly paragraph and indent!? I'm not sure if you just made it this way so that you could fit it onto the screen easily!.

At the end of the first line, with "ends", you should have a comma after that!.

Instead of "busy" in the third line, it would sound better with bury!. It flows off of the tounge easier!. In the fourth line, I would put "had" in front of arrived!. In the fifth line, you need a comma after "months"!. In the sixth line, it is "begin"!. In the twelfth line, you need a comma after "tolerable"!.

I would go through and just scan for the easy to miss mistakes, such as missing commas!.

Other then that, I love the essay and the topic!. It is very interesting and unique!.

Hope this helps!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Good job-missing a couple of commas and u need to change your spelling- do=due and coks=coax!. Maybe check out that last paragraph-I was a bit confused with some of the wording!. Good luck!Www@QuestionHome@Com