Art sketchbook annotation ..?

Question:HOW IS THIS? ANYTHING I COULD ADD/CHANGE TO MAKE IT BETTER??? It was just a cubism and distortion title page by the way to indroduce a topic in my sketchbook !

'On this page, I drew out the bubble writing then drew lines through it all to separate the words, ready for distortion. Then I distorted most letters and used blue and pink oil pastels to make my work look interesting and to add some colour.

I enjoyed doing this page, I love the colours I used and I think they worked really well together. The only thing I would probably change about my page is the bit of paper I had to stick over the ‘I’ in ‘Distortion’ because it went wrong, I do not think it is very noticeable though so it does not matter too much.'

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: HOW IS THIS? ANYTHING I COULD ADD/CHANGE TO MAKE IT BETTER??? It was just a cubism and distortion title page by the way to indroduce a topic in my sketchbook !

'On this page, I drew out the bubble writing then drew lines through it all to separate the words, ready for distortion. Then I distorted most letters and used blue and pink oil pastels to make my work look interesting and to add some colour.

I enjoyed doing this page, I love the colours I used and I think they worked really well together. The only thing I would probably change about my page is the bit of paper I had to stick over the ‘I’ in ‘Distortion’ because it went wrong, I do not think it is very noticeable though so it does not matter too much.'

I'm also doing art annotations, they kill me!
I think you could talk about why you used the style of writing and why you used the certain colours, and how they are relevant to your art project.
You could also compare it to another artists work, just type cubism art into Google, its good to do a little name dropping in your art.
I think annotations are the worst thing about art projects, I hate them!