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Question: Romeo and Juliet assistance, please!?
I had to rewrite the Prologue to Romeo and Juliet for Honors English 9
The prologue should be on a website somewhere, but this is my altered version!. Tell me if it would be valid (I changed words, and had to keep 10 syllables to a line, along with the rhyming scheme to abab cdcd efef gg)

Double abodes both similar in scial stature
Taking place in Verona, Italy,
From old vendetta brings forth new fracture,
Where theis dilemma results fataly!.

Coming from deadly hearts of the two foes
A couple of ill-fated lovers die,
the pair mistake, with pity overgoes
With their death, the families ceased their warcries

The feared passing of their foreshadowed love,
and the persistance of the parents feud
that, even with the loss, they couldn't forget
now is the topic of out two hour prelude!.

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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Yes you need to complete the last couplet but apart from that most of its brilliant!.You've got the idea and have made it original!.

I would ask you to consider changing fragments of it because at certain points (verse 2) it seems a bit to melodramatic which shakesphere wasn't!.

You've got the ryming system right well done!.

Back to language you've used 'the' quite alot could you alter that and have different connectives!?Www@QuestionHome@Com